How very interesting. It seems you were actually being trolled more then I was by your dear muse. So Shizuru still refuses to return to the game board. Let us hope that pushing forward leads her to some degree of what she seeks.

But in the end, a piece on the board is just that, a piece on the board. Shizuru may have sacrificed herself as the queen, but the king still remains. It's not going to end, not yet.

I can't help but feel that Tomoe is going to be dragged into this self loathing vortex created by Shizuru's denial. But then, if kept in form, the two may find mount purgatory very hospitable.

Forced to face the past in order to see the future.

Good lord! If she doesn't stop her catterwalling I'll drag her back to Fuka! :P

That being said everything seems to be going well, even if muse was unwilling to give you a name. I await the rest of the story. :)

Hmm, the change in tense makes sense now. I will with hold comment until more develops. :P

Changed the point of view at the end I see. It would seem that Shizuru's curiosity is leading her forward.

Well, isn't she just getting a little bit to demanding? As amusing as it would be for Midori to just grab Shizuru's collar and drag her back to Fuka kicking and screaming for trial, it just wouldn't suit this story.

With all the srs business Shizuru has going on she feels an affront to her when there is none. Paranoia anyone? The way she's acting is really making it hard to feel sorry for her. She's just being a whiny brat.

Time marches on and so does Shizuru. Hopefully not into a bottomless pit before she realizes how much of a little girl she's being. .

It would seem that 'judgement' did not come as Shizuru might have hoped. Something also odd, Shizuru has seemed to not even dignified Mai's excistance with a mention. If this is because of miss or spot-on I can't begin to guess.

As for Yukino, Nao and Mikoto not wishing to write letters it would fit with their personalities. Yukino would want a polite conversation and the other two do better to express face-to-face.

However, I do not believe Natsuki to be as harsh towards Shizuru as Shizuru reflects. But that has more to do with that unhealed , 'infected' wound she still bears. Natsuki, I would think is not that blunt but rather trying to earnestly help by staying out of it.

very sad written - i was near to cry. Poor shizuru.

I cant wait to read more of your fanfiction!

Sasu

Hmm, now it gets interesting. If she can then that shows at least an inkling of change. Shizuru is shaping up to be worth a bit more then I first thought.

She, in the end did seek an honorable death but was denied. Perhaps that was what freed the festering things within her. But such are the thoughts of a Yandere. They think that the end of their path of destruction awaits death. But what happens if you have to live? Shizuru gets to figure that one out.

Still she got the light end of the stick. She should be in an institution or worse. But in the end that would serve to be more detrimental and would overshadow the story with violent insanity.

But I have to be honest, even though I am one of the ones who wished for this, it is still hard to read. To see Shizuru so utterly broken and weak. You are certainly earning your keep.

And the seeds have been planted for Shizuru to rise up and become even stronger then before.

But there is only one way this can happen, she must want this for herself, to find her own strength. It was her own wanting and relying on things for another that destroyed her in the first place. She must want a future that she walks hand in hand with.

I can't help but think that this is ultimately more true to Shizuru's character then what was put forth by the writers of the anime. Unfortunatly and sadly this state is perhaps the best for her to be in. She must even the karma before she can even begin to try to reconnect with anything.

The karma is being returned in mental torment and angiush and also ultimately fitting. That may be cold of me to say. But if force is put forth greatly, then it must be returned at the same level.

Haruka is completely 100% correct. The collective will of the heavens granted her the ability to speak without hinderence not to mock Shizuru, but to help her. To give her the thing that would prove the most useful to her.

But, in the same swing, owning up also means facing it. This is the cross that Shizuru must bear for the rest of her life. She must recognize the pain that she has caused others, not only herself or Natsuki but the wound that she caused to the flow of life. To run away cheapens it.

Still, still and even more so. All she can think of is herself. And as long as she continues to do so and refuse to realize how others feel by mucking it up with her own self-pity, she will continue to run and fail. Haruka did all that she could be being honest. Natsuki did all that she could by letting Shizuru go. Will their efforts ultimately fail? Is Shizuru as worthless as she thinks?

Much to learn from this to those who'll listen. Rather rough to swallow for those who live in their cage of ShizNat bliss. This is her, this is the Shizuru that should be realized. Growth is a painful bloody mess. Thank you Sensei. I wait to see how your muse continues to shape this.

DANG! I am not the first one to review, but I guess I do not mind being second to your kohai.

Overall, I enjoyed this short piece, but I found it a bit brooding for the summer season.

Perhaps you are preparing us for the upcoming "Eclipse" and the eternally brooding Edward? Just kidding.

It would seem that the soul would go to into exile not to run away but to rethink. In this case, after everything done in the end, it would seem that the overwhelming passion and emotion was not enough to change the circuit.

In this complexity however, it was more then a simple mismatch. It would seem that Shizuru's heart did not take into account the possibility that when she finally passed her limit. Would things go as she hoped, no rather the way she wanted with her entire being.

But I think that the means didn't really matter so much as the fact that she more or less forced that circuit across Natsuki's heart open when it was nowhere near ready.

Ultimately in her own selfishness, but then, Shizuru does not see that. She claims to herself that it was for Natsuki. But in truth it was nothing more then an excuse. She crusaded in Natsuki's name but it was not what Natsuki wished.

Even so, that's not but the surface either. Still too much remains unseen. There is something more not present. I cannot provide any more then this. And even this does not feel complete. Detachment and loss features most clearly in this piece.

I also get the feeling that staying close ended up being as painful as being far away.