| Reviews for The Prevailing Darkness |
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Keeper of Fatestones 7/25/10 . chapter 2Hellfire and brimstone. You're saving my favourite Ancient for last. I'm intrigued, please update soon Grammatical: Near the end, you put "blue bean" instead of "beam". As well as "irrupting" instead of "erupting". Only two I noticed - |
Keeper of Fatestones 7/25/10 . chapter 1O.O Oh my... I do profess a sense of jealousy, this story is like an advancement of one I posted. Unfortunately, mine is on hiatus for the moment. Anyway, I look forward to further updates and more developments. Only grammatical suggestion I can make is this: When referring to multiple Roivas family members, it'll be a bit better to put "Roivas's" or "Roivas'" |
Richard B. Sampson Jr 6/18/10 . chapter 1A very interesting start. I like that it is set many years in the future, and that it appears to add many original characters. I do wish you good luck on it. |