Ah, you write so many awesome things!

What a beautiful, intense story! You did a wonderful job with the tension and Toris' conflicted emotions.

Oooh, you're really good at suspense! I have to say I'm quickly becoming a big fan of yours. I really loved the characterization and emotion you put into this story.

I truly love reading all of your stories becuase they're so well-written, in both the use and organization of words and the movement and character interpretation. Of all yours, this is one of my favorites, and is also one of my favorite short stories ever (including published works).

The tension of the story and the exploration of rebellion and guilt was really fascinating. You prsesented Lithuania's dilemma very well and I rally felt the problems. I don't see this view on the Russia/Lithuania relationship much. I really like it, and you've done it so wonderfully.

Great story; brought tears to my eyes and the good pain to your heart that only great stories bring. Even though these aren't your characters, you move them perfectly and mae them your own. I'm so happy that you posted this story. I can't wait to read what you do in the future and your past works!

hey, I have read a few of your fics, and if you dont mind, I would like to request something of you. The foreign phrases you use, could you just give their translations at the end of the chapter/fic? If it isnt too much trouble of course. I know we could use a translator but its kind of disruptive when you have to search all that for a translation and kinda kills the mood. No offense meant.

That said, your fics are very soulful and lovely

Very nice story. You had the right combination of tension and turmoil, and I think it not only reflected Lithuania's inner thoughts/desires but also the history of the time.

I think my heart was pounding the entire time!

I don't understand what Liet said to Russia though, in the last paragraph.

Ah, heart breakingly wonderful, as always. I feel the need to recommend 'Lithuania:1940 by servant of anubis'. Both of you write this pairing so wonderfully.

You effectively took my guilty pleasure - TorisxIvan emotional angst - and combined it with delicious storytelling. You have a powerful voice: I could feel the tension and strain between them building throughout, and the dramatic and wrenching release at the end.

I thought you conveyed Toris's inner anguish quite well with your writing style. I actually wanted to cry for him, I felt so bad... he's got complex emotions in this story, and you covered them well through his actions and gradual emotional shift.

While you've got a compelling voice, I'd extend a caution to you that I've received: be wary of run-on sentences in your writing, and watch your grammar; sometimes you have minor errors or omissions. (ex: Oh how he wished his freedom didn't have this cost… "Aš tave myliu, Vashya…! Aš tikrai… tikrai myliu tave!" An honest confession, an admission of guilt - Oh, how he wished his freedom didn't have this cost!

"Aš tave myliu, Vashya…! Aš tikrai… tikrai myliu tave!" An honest confession, an admission of guilt. )

Slight changes in the paragraphs and their separation could add a lot to your writing; I didn't notice at first that Toris had actually said something in that phrase until I re-read it. In addition, my English teacher also pointed out (in school projects) that generally '...' isn't an acceptable way to conclude a sentence unless followed by a new paragraph. Otherwise the pause between ideas doesn't seem to be pronounced enough?

Anyways, this was excellent to read : ) It flowed quickly and engaged my attention throughout. I found myself reading and rereading Ivan's last words, loving their simplicity and depth.

Very well done : )