Awesome chapter! update really soon.

This story is really good, but I feel the need to point out that the part where Leo and Bianca are jumping on the roofs, it looks like you ripped it off from Alladin. I thought I should let you know. Other than that, the story is really good.

I really like this story, it's really amazing! Keep up the good work :)

Hey this is awsome u should defintly continue this !

oh my gosh hi Katie :)

it's great update more soon.

A very emotional chapter, though it did not extort anything like that from me, I did not expect something like that to happen.

That was a very decent job you did, well done.

But please, get rid of that text at the bottom! Just put the story in the chapter, not that stuff in the bold/caps lock font!

It's okay keep on update really soon. see you on the next chapter.

I like the spacing between the paragraphs, that makes it easier to read, and I also like the elimination of the flashbacks.

I never tried the flashback thing, but flashbacks are way too distracting, and counter-intuitive to the brains.

This chapter has opened up a world of higher quality for the story, and although the flashbacks may have given a backstory for your character, they were too damaging.

Excellent jobs (and I like your new profile picture btw).

Great job and welcome back pls keep update your story I love it.

Wow that's quick keep up the good work.

and update soon.

It's good plus update soon.

Not bad, espcially the part where bianca was given no memory of her initial life on her birth planet. Excellent idea for the prologue.

The story sounds good so far.

But I have an advice for you: try to use more paragraphs. I for me think it's really hard to read much on PC, and it's even harder when you have to read big parts of text.

Also look out for repetitions you use to start your sentence (like the paragraph with the couple, you always wrote 'then', 'they then', 'then they').

Nontheless, don't give up, this can become quite good :-)

PS: 1st comment! Yay!