I just found this story, and it is really nice...

I love how you incorportated Eve into the Harry Potter universe without making her into a Mary-Sue; in fact, I like the lack of Harry etc! And your characterization of Professor Snape...lovely.

Am now progressing onto your profile to see if you've written any more!

Great story! Your Snape is brilliant! Very much in character. And Eve is a wonderful invention of yours. Glad, there is a sequel, have to check it out as soon as possible.

You did a really great job with this story. I love how you filled in around the canon with Snape. I especially love how your OC is completely uninvolved with the Trio. Very refreshing! Eve is a delight to read. Her development, both personal and magical, throughout the story rings true. Also, she's very realistic and human, and so is Snape for that matter. The non-canon dialogue you've written for him is very "in character" and flows well with the overall story of PoA. (Have you found new inspiration in OOtP at all?)

One of my favorite parts of the story was the parallel between Eve's friend Dee and Lupin. I don't know how JKR intends for lycanthropy to be seen, but an HIV/AIDS analogy, I think, is very fitting.

I really can't wait to read another story about Eve! You've very seamlessly fit her into the magical world (and at a difficult age, too) and I think seeing her in a teaching capacity is going to be great. Hopefully, by putting her in a non-canon based story, you'll find it easier! Please, email me when you get started on the next book if it's not too much trouble. I'm waiting on the edge of my seat! (My address is in my profile)

A touching end. I am glad Eve and Snape left each other on a peaceful, understanding note. Excellent story you have here. I really enjoyed reading it and I envy you your fluent and smooth writing style. Where I am pretty confident about my poetry I have done very little prose writing so I am much more self-conscious about it. I do hope you plan on posting more here soon!

Take Care Until Then
Alida

Oh - the story is finishing - I can feel it winding down now and that is a rather sad feeling. Poor Lupin - I am glad J. Rowling (am I spelling that right?) is planning on bringing him back in future books cause he was a good character.

Alida

E Gats! I just want to hit Snape over the back of his head and tell him to open his eyes. Don't get me wrong - I do feel really bad for him but I mean - gack! Try not to be blinded by your own problems.

I really liked the scene between Dumbledore and Snape. It was deep and well thought out. Showed a nice level between their friendship.

Alida

Poor Snape - poor blind, stupid, bitter Snape. Ah - that was one of the best chapters yet. My eyes were glued to the words.

Must keep reading.
Alida

Oh... I see no good coming from that discovey. Yeeps! Eve and Snape are going to have some uncomfortable moments in the coming chapters. Poor Snape - his past is always going to haunt him.

Dumbledore in a Muggle romance - I liked the idea. Poor guy - it would suck to have those you love die around you - makes you wonder if immortality would be more curse then gift. Food for thought at any rate.

Alida

A nice little serious chapter. It will be an eye opener for Eve I think but you are right - there are a lot of connections between the Death Eaters and the Nazi's. Interesting essay topic at any rate.

Alida

Oh - intense scene. That one in the book had me on the edge of my seat and re-reading it from this different perspective was no different. Very intense scene.

Sorry for the short reviews again - I am getting tired and my mind is just not functioning clearly so comments are just not forming themselves.

Alida

Thehehehe - Way to go Eve! *imagines Snape flying backwards into the snow* Well, he did deserve it. Anyone else would have called out to let her know who was there and Snape does need to have his pride pricked on occassion.

Alida

Another good chapter - I am not sure what else to comment on - but I did want to tell you I liked it. Poor grumpy Snape. Nightmares are not nice and I think you making him have them add’s to his character. Again - little character details like that add such depths to your story. Well done.

Alida

These tutorials with Snape remind me of my chemistry labs. I had an awful TA who use to quiz you constantly about the readings and criticize you if you made a mistake. I can really sympathize with her position because I have lived it.

I liked the Scrooge (sp?) / Snape parallel. Nice little literary allusion.

Alida

I love Dumbledore. I know I said that in an earlier review as well but you just make him so fatherly, wise and compassionate. You have his character down pact. I have problems keeping characterization and you just make it look so easy. Nicely done.

Alida

“If he hadn’t been the only suspect, Snape might have actually believed that Lupin knew nothing about how Black had entered the castle.” theheheh (that is my giggle noise in case you were wondering). I liked that line. It summed up the relationship (or lack there of) between lupin and Snape perfectly.

Sorry - if you hadn’t noticed I like picking out lines in chapters that really stood out for me - so I hope re-reading what you wrote in a review doesn’t bother you too much.

Ah - poor Snape - I actually felt sorry for him the way he felt betrayed by Dumbledor’s seemingly dismissal of his theory. You wrote that very well because Snape isn’t usually a sympathetic character but you made it very believable

LOL - loved the mental image of Eve strangling Snape’s “scrawny neck”. I am glad she stood up to him. He does enjoy being a jerk so it is nice to see the students stand up for themselves. Go Eve!

Alida