I was literally about to kill something until I read the end (you resolved it in two sentences!)...that ending was so abrupt and came so quickly...

While I loved the ending and was about to mope about his second breakup in the same amount of months, I wished you had expanded the ending a bit more :(

Great work!

What a beautifully written story. Cashback is a wonderful movie and you've really captured Ben's personality. Keep up the excellent work! D

awww... so sweet that he goes with her 333

and congrats on capturing the essence of what is Ben and his story-telling perfectly... I wish I was as poetic when I'm suffering from insomnia

good job girl!