Well, it looks like Mark can try to solve out this problem out.

Not bad... This is actually the first fanfic that I've read from you, and it's looking pretty promising. The characters are well-described, and I'm convinced for the most part. Just a bit more description as GMF (GriffinsMustFly) said and a little less dashes to point out the dialogue, and you'll be good. ;)

just one word.. CONTINUEEEEEE!

I LOOOVE IT!3 it's sooo cuuute!*w* PLEASE TWIIN CONTINUE NOOOOW!XD

uh,wow. you think YIN will have a heartattack?im having one right now! (not really,but you know what i mean.)i'd be freaked if that was me. even though i dont support YinxYuck,i still like this story.

Rosie

have a nice day&dont get hit by a car?[ahahaha!]

seriously,where does your sense of humor come from?

this chapter really inspired me and totally great :)

I don't care with some mistakes and it doesn't really matter for me

Yang seems pretty smarter in here and yeah...Yuck really got into a rush to the girl but directly ask to runaway? is he gone insane already? I mean, she just woke up...oh let me just wait until the next one.

-Avi

OH GOD! i almost fainted with a red face while reading this... its soooooooooooooo ROMANTIC! so... Yin and Yuck is gonna elope... or runaway, to where? hmmm... i wonder, i wonder... but im sooooooo excited to find out! what about Lee? it seems guilt is taking over him again xDD anyway, awesome chapter as always! keep up the great work sis!

Conveniently enough, today I also watched part 1 of The Wolf Blood Lineage on MFT, and it caused me brain damage. Not a lot (if the dinosaur rape, vampire butt sex, and gargoyle porn hadn't numbed me you'd think I was inhuman). But still enough to cause me pain. Thank you for posting this chapter, and give me back a shred of my sanity. Are there mistakes? Yes, I've seen worse. Will Yin say yes? Probably. Will this end badly no matter what choice Yin makes? Yes, Yuck will snap if she says no; Yang will have an emotional breakdown if she says yes, etc. It's a nice set up for dramatic tension. Can you write a good story without dramatic tension? Well, never say never, but it's pretty hard. I loved the amount of sibling love in this chapter in the last. Since my relationship with my brother is like Yin's relationship with Yang, can I really relate to this and it doesn't strain on my suspension of disbelief. Most people seem to make it incestuous, and that saddens me.

Any-who, my only real nitpick is when you switched into Yuck's POV for one paragraph. It was very jarring and out of place. Limited Third-person point of view would've worked just fine. I'm looking forward to the next installment.

Have a nice day & don't get hit by a car,

Rosie

so... chapter nearly gave me a happy heartattack!

(to WooFooGirl&Juliets Heart)

so sue me.

I HAVE A MAJOR HATE FOR YIN ALRIGHT?

thanks for answering my review!but wow,this made me sorta reminded me of a Chick , Jema is harsh.

JemaxLena

HARSH!

im speechless...

Malo:wow.

Jay:wow.

Azurite:wow.

Me:WOW.

that's all i can say.

um...jema's a guy.

! i cant wait anymore! please update!

so...touching. my God,that is really a sweet bro&sis moment.

Malo:*blows nose with tissue*

Gris:hey are you crying?

Malo:no,i just thought this was 's all!