   JJ Rust 7/22/10 . chapter 1Not bad. I would have liked to have seen more dialogue between the two, and either Harry or Luna thinking about how much the other means to them. Also, maybe a dash of conflict could be added. Having to deal with insults and snide comments of the student population and rising above them.
One typo I caught: "layed" should be "laid"
Keep on writing. |
| Katie - Lyn Della Robia 7/15/10 . chapter 1 Squee! So cute Tori! |
| Scabbers1957 7/12/10 . chapter 1 Quoting Ronald Weasley "Bloody Ell" that waasa great lil shortie..very well done.
Like the other one..I'll add it to my favs & Haruna Community.
:) |
| musicloverx26 7/1/10 . chapter 1 awwww
that was a load of major fluff
but I really liked it.
musicloverx26 |
| walters1 7/1/10 . chapter 1 Definitely good enough! Thank you, thank you, thank you! I love this fic, and can't wait to see more! |
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