 jowilleatyuh 5/6/12 . chapter 16OWW- My jaw hurts from dropping open- Literally- no joke- Remus of ALL people? *faints* No wonder Lucius would be so protective! Hell... A Marauder with a Black other than Sirius... hehe... off to scavenge for some NxR stories xD
*chuckles*
Beautifully written; it truly was- I love how everything was gradual instead of it being abrupt and all. You honestly have made Ginny & Draco one of my newest favorite couples xD |
 jowilleatyuh 5/6/12 . chapter 15Love the ending of this chapter; hell the beginning of this chapter had my heart running so quickly- Perfectly described xD |
 jowilleatyuh 5/6/12 . chapter 12Holy shit... That definitely surprised me... |
 jowilleatyuh 5/6/12 . chapter 1LOVE the beginning- I was never fond of Ginny x Draco pairings [my pagedisplay page] but this one honestly caught my eye- Good summary; off to see how this turns out |
 Remus' Moonlett 4/29/12 . chapter 12This is the first time that I had ever seen Harry make a fool of himself. I mean, I feel a bit embarrassed for his actions, because that's just me. And I don't believe Draco would do such things to her to murder her. This story is amazing! |
 anon 4/26/12 . chapter 11 Sophies world is my favourite book too! I was actually thinking that Ginny should give him that book before you said, just because it's so good...
Anyways I like this story :) it's suspenseful |
 eiri 3/17/12 . chapter 1 This fic brought me to the DG fandom and even after 10 years its still one of the best DG fic (plot-wise) ever written. I read this when it was work in progress and this fic tested my patience in waiting for the chapters. :D
to everyone whose commenting on the DG names and Blaise being a boy, and Vladimir not being Draco's granfather's name:
notice the date this fic was written, 2002 which is pre-OOTP. at that time everyone was not aware of Ginny's name as Ginerva nor we do not know Blaise gender and that Draco's grandfather name would appear in the coming books. If you read fics written at that time Virginia was the common name used and Blaise would alternately be a boy or girl. It irks me to read such comment when one does not trace back the timeline this fic was written.
To top it all this would be an enduring classic to be read over and over again. :)
to the author: after this years its the first time I notice that you could be a Filipino (and maybe a JE/jpop fan...) :D drop me an email if you are one of us and lets flail. email me :D |
 anon 3/17/12 . chapter 1 You do realize blaise is a guy right seriously why make a guy into a girl it is wrong on so many levels u really should go back and fix that! |
 xenacow 2/23/12 . chapter 16This is an amazing story, and even if you aren't going to go on with it, I think that you should write other stories. |
 beekers 2/17/12 . chapter 1 i am aware that you wrote this story 10 years ago and might not even be looking at reviews now
but ginny's real name is ginerva.
and that's kind of big thing to mess up :/
otherwise, i am intrigued |
 Koukou-sei tantei 2/8/12 . chapter 1Did you know that this story made me a D/G shipper? I SO 3 IT! You're so awesome! And I was so happy when I found out that you're a Filipino too! \o/
I'll be looking froward to more of your stories! Congratulations and keep it up! :D |
 Kim 1/27/12 . chapter 1 Just in response to Hannah:
At the time this was written, we did not know what Ginny's full name was, nor did we know for definite that Zabini is a boy. |
 Hannah 12/13/11 . chapter 1 It's fairly good, but there's a lot of.. Messiness in it. Why does it constantly have past and present tense next to one another? And, also, there are some technical issues...
For instance, Ginny's name is Ginevra, not Virginia... Also, Blaise Zabini is a girl. |
 Aonokioku 11/15/11 . chapter 1Pretty good so far; I can't wait to read more!
Now, I DO know you apologized already for errors, but I thought I would point out a few anyway.
1)Okay, there were a few sudden verb shifts (Even though I just read it I can't find an example lol) 'He then smiles sadly' rather than 'He then smiled sadly.' Very common actually, but makes the whole thing sound rather awkward.
2)Some 'fixed' errors that still had the error in place, along with the correct version 'He am is okay'
3) not errors, just suggestions! "her heeled-shoes making quick staccato noises...' One of the things you should remember with writing is to use the most eloquent words possible. However, if you go over board, you can sound ambitions or like a prat.
But going back to it... rather than using 'noises' after 'quick staccato' try using 'clicks' 'taps', or 'clacks', noises that are already quick and staccato sounding when you read them. Or, instead of putting one of the adjectives, just use one, quick or staccato (your choice) along with the describing noun.
I hope you'll take this as it was meant; no offense was intended in the least.
References: English 111 :)
Aonokioku |
 LucieMarie 11/10/11 . chapter 16I realize that this review is very late in the game, but I wanted you to know that I really enjoyed this story. I was impressed by the complexity of it - something I've been trying to work on for my next story. You obviously have specific details and story-lines planned for a while. My only complaint is that, while transitioning between scenes, you didn't opt to use a page break (or any kind of warning). It confused me at parts, but I was able to get over it quickly. Overall, I'm impressed! |