Yay! Happy endings are the best! :-3

Hey, I think you had a really good story, but in my oppinion you should have explained more about Pansy's motives, like why;d she want Draco kissed by dementors/sent to Azkaban if wanted to marry him? And how do Draco and Hermione turn out in the end? Only one date at Hogsmeade? I think it could have gone a few chaps longer. But thats just me :D Cheers x

Great story :]

Thanks for posting! Very creative with Pansy! And I love Draco in this :D

NICE

I like this story, well thought out, some humour and just enough smut to make me blush :)

WOW.

wow! thank god! i almost freaked when you killed off Ginny! I was just about ready to flame you for killing off one of my favorite characters! :) but well, since you brought her back to life...AWESOME! great-no wait, FANTASTIC- story! :D loved it! i truly, without a doubt, did enjoy reading it ! :) please write more stories!

It was all right, you had a few capalaztion issues and a couple run on sentences, but otherwise it was pretty good.

Aww I loved this so much! thank you for writing it!

Also, don't forget spell check and commas! For instance, "There was no shakiness, no sarcasm just honest need and passion" needs an extra comma between "sarcasm" and "just."

You have a lot of details in the making-out scenes, don't forget to put them in other scenes too! That way the reader will enjoy the whole story, not just parts of it.

Hm, a pretty decent fanfic as fanfics go. I rather liked that the romance wasn't at the front of the fic, but was tied in with the greater plot.

Be careful about being out of character. I noticed that swears often get tossed around in this fic, even by characters who have never sworn before in the books (Hermione, Ginny). Just because people are older and have been through hard times doesn't necessarily mean that they become vulgar. It also doesn't mean that they lie just because things get complicated. Hermione has always struck me as a very logical person that isn't governed by her emotions, so any new feelings for Draco aren't going to push her into lying for him if it means that he, or whomever is the murderer, will go free. (That case would only work if she was becoming somewhat more emotional, or was always like that to begin with.) Be careful of almost complete 180's too, such as Hermione's little "glam" session. Yes, the "Cinderella" idea is a very attractive one, especially for girls who usually don't do so, but though Hermione might become more confident because of it, that doesn't mean that she immediately is confident enough to flirt with a couple of boys. That sort of thing takes a bit longer and a more than a couple of "glam" sessions. Remember how nervous Hermione was at the Yule Ball? Also, McGonagall is cut from the same, logical cloth as Hermione and would not jump to conclusions about Draco without proof. Remember, she is always fair. Also, just because she is comforting Hermione (as in the scene where "Pansy" is killed), doesn't mean she becomes too out of character. I believe that you can convey just as much shock in the tone and the term "dear" (which McGonagall has used before) than the term "sweetheart," which is a bit more of an romantic endearment. Likewise, how could any of these characters, never mind Pansy, brew such a powerful Draught of Living Death? Without Snape's help, Harry wouldn't have managed it, and it is said in the books that it's a very complicated and difficult task that Hermione couldn't manage alone. Just general skill and hard work in class doesn't make up for actual talent at something. Besides, wouldn't it be more interesting if someone helped Pansy?

Also beware spelling errors. For instance, you use the word "bare" many times, but really mean "bear." Just as a personal choice, I rather prefer stories to be in paragraph formats with proper indentations at the beginnings. Having the fic displayed in a series of only a couple of lines breaks up the flow of the reading and thus the reader's concentration on the story. It jerks the reader out of the story instead of keeping them into it, as paragraphs would do.

The plot is also pretty good for a fanfic, but don't be afraid to let an idea stew for a while or get a friend to help edit it until you can make it truly good. J.K. Rowling has an incredible grasp of complicated and detailed plots and interactions. Though the plot of this story is exciting, it's not very innovative and smaller scenes aren't very detailed, such as Hermione's flight up to the tower (though you do get props for thinking of using the Polyjuice Potion and the Draught of Living Death.) If you do write a mystery, don't forget the "drawing room" scene where the mystery is explained and the reader has an "aha!" moment. Though you do have Hermione and Draco go through the motions of solving the mystery, you don't explain how Pansy got the rat or brewed/stole the potions. The mystery doesn't have to be explained completely, since the audience will figure it out, but you do have to fill some of the gaps.

that was REALLY GOOD! I enjoyed it very much!

Aww. I was close. There IS polyjuice potion involved, but they're not really dead, I'm guessing? Time to read on and see if I'm right.

I'd just like to say, I haven't read past this chapter yet but my guess is -

It's Luna. But not Luna. She was drinking from a personal bottle - not part of her canon, but very reminiscent of Crouch/Moody in GoF. Also, Ginny had just voiced suspicions before she was found. Which means Hermione is probably next.

Amirite? Eh. Could be wrong. Time to read on, I suppose?

(Why doesn't McGonagall just cast priori incantartum on all of their wands? Is she in on it, too? Cause she's been acting strange.)