please dont end it here love the story please write some more

MR. Kraven PLEASE CONTINUE WITH THIS STORY! IT REALLY IS A GREAT STORY! I AM VERY MUCH LOOKING FOWARD TO THIS :]

I, like you is very interested and is a fan of bioshock and the bermuda triangle, please continue on writing this story. it is very great and i am hoping to continue to read this short series. :D

Well writen, author. Please, contuine.

Holy Balls! That was so cool! WRITE MORE!

Holy crap mutha trucka dat was fanatically amazingly spectacular CONTINUE!

Very good new chapter please.

Good story :) love it

Well, that was rather fun. I really liked how you introduced to new characters so efficiently and made them all instantly likable, Jacobson being my personal favorite because elderly soldiers always strike well with me. Anyways, I really like how the whole thing goes from being violent as all Hell then slowly diverges into good old fashioned armed-to-the-teeth Love Triangle, "Put Foot in Mouth, Remove Foot in Mouth", and some rather interesting parts where you explained just what happened and why in the previous chapters. This is all looking up to be extremely good and funny, and if I may a suggestion: when Eleanor and Catalina get a small break from all the killing within a safe-house and are separated from the boys... could they possibly have a humorous conversation debating about who has... err... "grown-up" better? This opens up a whole host of humorous incrimination situations and a possible new trait for the ever arrogant and confident Catalina: inappropriate calmness in the face of being, well, inappropriate... preferably half-naked. But, seeing as I have remembered that this is a K, nevermind, and bring on the childish fighting between grown-ups.

Looking forward to the next chapter, this is Ruff Gareth, signing this review.

-R.G-

First on the line-up: the Bermuda Triangle Mystery. I really loved how you turned the Mysterious Mystery of the Bermuda Triangle into something I like and can fully comprehend; Jack Ryan purposefully building Storm Generators for the purpose of keeping his beloved Rapture safe is both plausible and chalks up a rather good one to your innovation skills.

Second: Romance. I can understand fully why the flavor of the Jack/Eleanor relationship is like this, but I don't like it. Nonetheless, I will continue reading it, as it is good Jack/Eleanor and the reference to one of my favorite psychologists of all time and a rather amusing imaginary conversation between him and Eleanor about the psychological basis of her relationship with Jack proved to be a rather amusing image. I thank you for that.

Third and final: Splicers. Clever mixing of Romance and Wonderful Surprise; I really like how you turned the Betelgeuse into what seemed to be a rather irrelevant description then turned it into salvation, and finally the source of our new type of enemy (and a rather impressive one at that): Radioactive Splicers. I'd love to see how you develop this whole thing.

Looking forward to reading the next chapter, this is Ruff Gareth, signing this review.

-R.G.-

Well, this is proving to be quite the interesting story! Though your start was rather slow and over expository, I appreciate the reality of Desperation and Restlessness you gave Eleanor, the Sisters and Lamb when they were on a diving craft, not safe from the confines of Rapture still. Though I would have appreciated some more explanation as to how Lamb had managed to get that gag from her mouth removed, the slight hiccup that could become catastrophic failure was enough for me. Anyways, with the whole regards to Jack's meeting with Eleanor (my most anticipated part, actually), I would have appreciated a first meeting which would be more incriminating and embarassing than being caught with your dress down; something like Eleanor being in a compromising position or possibly even punching or setting fire to Jack from the very real nightmares she still has from Rapture would have made more entertainment from the Plot value.

Anyways, I appreciate how the whole story is obviously /-, but the ending to chapter one, though dramatic in its own right, is not very effective to me. For some reason being caught in super-storms just don't do it for me anymore.

Looking forward to reading the next chapter, this is Ruff Gareth, signing this review.

-R.G.-

I haven't read many Bioshock stories, but this is one of the best fanfics I have ever read. I look foreward to your next chapter

great chapter

Ooh, irradiated Adam? Sounds wicked. :P

Excited for the next chapter! Keep it up!

I LOVE THIS STORY PLS UPDATE