Well...interesting. I guess any fic that has Danzo come to a "bad end" has merits to stand on its own. P

Ever since Kurenai's first appearence in the series, I've wondered if she were a distant relative to the Uchiha (even Karin's eyes, which are also red, don't quite look as similar to the Sharingan as Kurenai's). And I love the quotes:

"The Sharingan, from the moment of its birth, has been plotting. It is the greatest of all master manipulators, and has been seemingly orchestrating its own destruction from day one. It thrives in darkness and breeds madness in its wielders, not because it can, or even because it is good at it."

And

"He knows, for example, that there are over thirty-two different known doujutsu in Konoha's history. Perhaps ten of of them have actually been separate, actual doujutsu, but the rest have been the Sharingan, masquerading in another form."

I was interested to see the end, but somehow disappointed once I read it... It seems very strange that Sai would kill Danzou for something as petty as a couple of eyes. Also, I think you should add Tenten to the list of characters in the story. It is, after all, about her.

Overall the writing was very nice! Almost no mistakes, and the sentence structure was beautiful. I did see one or two sentence fragments, though. You should watch out for that.

Wow. This was pretty damn fantastic. I'm glad I found this fic. You don't find many like it (mostly 'cos it's unique lololol).

Depending how you look at it, this is actually pretty damn plausible. Actually, after the Sasuke-Itachi fight in the manga and the revelations that come after, this fic is REALLY REALLY plausible. XD

interesting concept (i've always wondered about the color of Kurenia's eyes) but clearly not your best work narrative wise. i think the long exposition at the beginning warming up to the plot was quite unnecessary since anyone following the series is likely to have come to the same conclusion; it seemed especially unnecessary since this was such a short story.

you might have just started at "Tenten has always been special, though she never knew it" and the story would have read approximately the same (although i can imagine the prospect of culling off so much text would have been quite daunting since it was the product of time and effort.) this was probably difficult to make interesting since you're focusing on too very emotionally flat characters but i still would have liked a little more than what was presented.

Awesome writing, Mr. Grey.

When I first read the story title I thought, "WHAAAAAAT! NO! NATE WRITES YAOI!"

Then there's TenTen's corpse. With your summary you made the story sound... suspicious. In a bad way.

Good thing you DIDN'T.

The plot that the Sharingan manifests in different forms throughout the different clans in Konoha is good. The way you wrote it is awesome.

Very awesome Mr. Grey! Make moooooooorrrre!

P.S. Yeah, it comes to mind; how the heck can Naruto hide himself while wearing orange?

Pwnt

EPIC WIN. Seriously. That was some nasty, but awesome, stuff there, man. WRITE MORE NARUTO FF SO WE CAN GAAAAAAH OVER YOUR AWESOME.

A dead Tenten, I never through it could be turned into a story, damn. And she is my favourite character throughout the whole Naruto series but moving on, I say alot of hate and pain. I must say it was very good. Though I don't really know what danzo is really planning to do... I'm glad you added Tenten in the story, as a girl who has power yet no one knows it, (even though, she doesn't really have that kind of power. :/)

But moving on. Loved it.