Pretty Kool!:]

First of all, let me say I am glad you were able to execute two aspects of writing very well, two which often don't go hand in hand.
I am quite impressed that you were able to be *TASTEFUL* along with *ROMANTIC* in the same piece. It's a good accomplishment that many writers cannot even see before their eyes. That said, let's get to the review.
I like the format of your piece. It allows for a bit of a fast pace and for the reader to really get "in" to the story. Once this pace picks the reader up, the rapid procession of dialogue and images whisk away the lingering reality that had been clouding the digestion of the story.
While what I won't do is pick apart every line, a few things I liked were the different styles of presentation all around. That really helped contribute to my reading experience.
The only real "downside" to your writing is a slight inconsistency in the presentation of verbs. I'm not sure if this is intentional, but it was noticable.
Great job, and keep up the great work.
-R

Awww! :)

That was cute ;)

though im STILL kinda SORE that you used this title but what to do...i have already 'given' this title to you..so i guess i cant sue u..haha...anyways..great job on this one..betta reader demands more from u! ]

Hm, nice! I don't know if it's because I've never seen AS before, or if it's just me, but the fic moved just a little bit too fast, and you could have added some more description during the ball. All in all though, well done! I'm beginning to like these two characters! Well, Lucifiel at least .

Amazing fic! really good with the inner feelings on both sides! at least it isn't disgustingly lemon and u did a really good job of bring out the character of both of them here! write more fics soon! i want to read more!

Lucifiel_Blackwings DL

hey donna you asked for a your stinkin' review so here it is...

its not really bad... erm... for AS... really... Alexiel/Lucifel is a nice pairing... you really could've added more detail to the ballroom part.. etc etc... well watever... its still not bad... although... *evil grin* I wouldn't have minded if you made it a lemon... hehehe or at least a bit of lime... ya know ! *nudge nudge wink wink* cumon ! Bah ! I think you need some prompting ! Argh... I wrote a lime faster than you hahahaha ! *insane laughter*

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*cough* sorry. I'm goin' mad. And you will go mad wif me ! Hahahaha ! Ok I'll stop ! Seriously !

Nice fic where the angels have to keep a social life, heee..-

Nice fic...! I *love* the way you characterize Alexiel..! That scene in in heaven was my fav... very clever the way Alexiel and Lucifer interact there, that was genious! and your introduction is good (I still like that garden scene with Rapheal, it's cute!) you definately characterized Alexiel well... could've used some more detail in the ballroom scene, but other than that the story's perfect, and again, Alexiel is very well done, very emotional; I like that. _

hmmmmmmmmmmmm... hehehee, not bad ! i just thought that Lucifiel should be the one who is more drunk and he *cough*assualts*cough* a half drunk Alexiel.. that will provide more action !:) there should be more naughty contents in here ...