This is a wonderful take of what happens after. Although the ending of the manga was amusing, it left me quite unsatisfied. So thank you for this! You played Yoh's emotions very well, they were in character, and your writing style's excellent. Kudos to you! :)

This reads like poetry, like song. You depicted Yoh, Haruna, and the fervency of young love perfectly. The last description of Haruna couldn't be more accurate. When I first started the manga, I thought that she was too sensitive and a bit pathetic, but really, how much courage it must take to be so vulnerable.

Beautiful story :)

I think this is the first High School Debut fic I've read and actually really liked. You got the complexity of Yoh and Haruna's feelings to show through your words and it felt very poetic. It also felt like grew up a bit in this fic, emotionally as well as physically. Thank you for posting such an interesting story! :)

This is oh so beautiful. I love your writing style, and the flow of the story through Yoh's point of view. I loved the atmosphere between Yoh and Haruna, with them being themselves and yet more mature, feeling more deeply and strongly for each other but still with that pure, unadulterated love.

I really really loved this. Thank you for this wonderful masterpiece, and I hope to read more from you soon.

Ahhh this is LOVELY!

i love this ! its amazing i can picture it ! and in the manga u didnt really know wat yoh was thinking so keep writing please

I love this fic! Sensual but not too much and very in character. I also love that it's written in Yoh's pov. It's very hard to pull off but this was just brilliant! I hope you write more!

Aww that was beautifully written. Thanks for sharing your work D

That was so adorable! I love them. They're my favorite pairing!

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Sooooo cute! Ah You managed to get Yoh exactly as he is! (or at least exactly as I think he is in his mind) It was fun to read!

Damnit. Why'd I click on this story? Oh right, cause it sounded awesome. Well you know what?

It was. I really was very impressed. I smiled, and silently cooed and was utterly satisfied with this. It was in character, well-written (there were grammar mistakes on occasion though), thoughtful and believable. I enjoyed reading this very much. Thank you so much for writing it. Your writing is unexpectedly poetic. It added a very fresh imagery to this type of couple. :3 Thanks for writing.

cool great

I am ecstatic to find something like this: in character, believable, vividly painting pictures straight out of the manga and being very well written as well.

After my second read through, this moment was missing and I turned to trusty fanfiction. However it's so difficult to get it right. Or I am just picky. So thank you for this! :)

When i read the tummy scene i thought.. oh.. she's pregnant... then i was like wait... nvm! ;

I like i tho..

This is so cute!

It was nice seeing Yoh's sensative side come out a bit at the end :)