I really like this story - it is a well written "Whodunit" and kept me on the edge of my seat all the time. I don't really like romantic stories, but this one was okay. I'd be even more happy if you corrected all the spelling errors. I also think Michael wouldn't be so stupid to walk into a trap that is so obvious. Oh, and scorpions have 6 legs, not 4. But apart from minor details like that, it it a great story!

*Very* nicely done! I hope to read more of your fanfic in the future. :-)

loved your story. i liked that michael and bonnie worked together on this case. would love to read more...HINT ;)

Great job! I adored Knight Rider as a kid growing up and Michael and Bonnie were always my favorite couple. No matter what girl he ended up with each week, he always came back to her in the end. This was really terrific. I hope you're planning a short little follow up. Something to tie up the loose ends? It would make addicted readers (and hopeless romantics) like me really, really happy.

Good story. You could have left out the witches, they are demonic.

This story was very engaging and readable (despite a few typos, spelling mistakes, etc). The writing was nice and concise. It had some great dialog and interesting, well differentiated characters.

Great story.