 kyleisgod 7/16/10 . chapter 1Great job, dude! I loved how you wrote Kenny's character. He was funny, IC, and a boy. Stan's character, likewise, was IC, a boy, and his relationship with Kyle being portrayed as a bit more lovey-dovey was perfect since that's how they should realistically be written most of the time in a slash setting. Stan being hesitant to take part in the threeway was a nice touch of realism as well. The same reality showed in your writing when Kenny was too exhausted to continue past two releases. Most boys can't even handle two in a row like that, but the ones who do are definitely spent afterward. Your sentences were still short and you could've been a bit more descriptive at certain points, but this was very good. |
 CheezzyPoofs 7/16/10 . chapter 1Lol. This is more Kenny & Stan than Kenny & Kyle. :P Good job, that was very hot and realistic. And again you made me laugh, Stan's last line was hilarious. LUVYOU _ I wonder if you're a girl or boy..
Maybe some constructive critism for your further smut stories, I want to suggest that you make Kyle on top for once, like, if you think about it, it makes more sense. XD
Stan sensitive, cries easily, loves animals (lolfaggot xD)
Kyle strong, agressive, can own anybody, has a low temper, is easily agitated
Actually I had this threesome idea involving Wendy, Stan and Kyle.. Like Stan can't get a stiffie with Wendy, so she needs the help of agressive Kyle (she will give him tickets to The Raging Pussies if he'll help her). Of course Stan will be the bottom in the story, and Wendy and Kyle on top. Maybe you can write this, if you have time. :D
All in all, THANKS FOR THE HOT PRESENTTTT. |