I LOVE Jon and Jen (the reason I'm on this site is because someone said there was a story about it). The pianist thing kind of came out of nowhere, but I think you've captured the character of John pretty well. I like the way you told the story within the story (not after or before). I'd be interested to hear more.

Keep going I love John and Jen! My brother and I sing this all the time. :) especially when he gets mad at me. we sing and then it sorts it all out i love the passion here keep going!