you really have a knack for angsty fics. :)

Such an intense moment!

I agree with the reviewer who said it was puzzling & distracting trying to figure out the PoV.

I love how the last sentence echoes the structure of "she's never seen Gellert this angry."

I love this story. It's so good. I love the way it is described, but I'm confused on who "he" is. While I think it's Albus, you might want to use Albus more instead of "he" in the first paragraphs. I really do love this story. It's it's kinda heart wrenching, I guess. In a good way. Very, very VERY good story. Just amazing. Love the end. Do you get that I love this story? 'Cause i do. :D

wow that was amazing. Really captured the moment perfectly.

This is really well written! Your grammar and spelling is almost flawless. I loved the description that you used, and I loved how Ariana had a doll as it represents her innocence.

I loved how Aberforth sees what happens as this only will add to Albus's guilt and shows that he is the only one who is aware.

I liked the description at the end where Albus turns round and sees Ariana, it conveys this idea that Albus is shocked as to what has happened.

Great work! I have really enjoyed reading this :D

-Sarah (xoxLewrahxox)