I'm really enjoying this story- well written with engaging characters.

I'm very impressed with your use of inculcate. Hardly anyone else uses that word. It grabbed my attention. Usually I can tell within the first 50 words whether I'm going to enjoy a story. So I have hopes for your entire story.

You have a typo though:

"Though her nurse, aunt, maid and mistress all tried to inculcate her [WITH] (not the) manners worthy of her rank, the eleven year-old girl resisted with all her headstrongness.

Really really good plot exposition in the first chapter!

Good description and vivid imagery. The fact that you also introduced minor characters -instead of only working with the main ones- and fleshed them out a bit is a huge plus and adds more depth to the story. And the last scene with Faramir and Lothiriel was quite entertaining.

Certh

Wow, this story is great! Your writing has just the right amount of emotion to make it moving without being sappy. Please post some more soon, I really want to read it!

Really great story! please update soon and I can't wait for Eomer to arrive, what will happen?

I really like this story and want to know where its going. So you'll need to update please!

Oh please, update soon! :)

Nice chapter. I must say I rather enjoyed those last scenes with Faramir and Lothiriel.

great story; Lothriel is indeed strong mentally if she could push herself past her feelings.

really sweet story

I liked how you portraited the princess and faramir

I'll be waiting to read more

That was a... passionate chapter. A piece of advice though: you might want to mind your wording in certain scenes, considering that this is not a fanfiction set in modern times, but in some sort of medieval ones. That said, I believe that the word 'ride' in that descriptive sentence depicting Esuthain's daydream does not quite fit.

Also, Lothiriel's straightforwardness in certain matters is somewhat unsuitable, given that in medieval times unmarried women were largely kept in the dark concerning love-making and what it entailed. Their husbands were supposed to 'educate' them when they married.

On the same note and for the same aforementioned reason, it is most highly unlikely that libraries would have books describing the act of love-making down to details.

Furthermore, medical knowledge in biology wasn't remotely that advanced in the middle ages so that it could enable women to calculate their ovulation date. The fine mechanism of a woman's biological cycle wasn't even discovered back then. Plus, such matters were rather avoided as a topic of discussion, even more so between unmarried people of the opposite gender.

Middle-earth is a more or less medieval-ish place, so a corresponding literary style is necessary when writing stories related to such a setting.

Other than that, I quite liked how Lothiriel and Esuthain gradually came to realise their relationship could not be.

Keep writing!

Certh

really cool story. please update soon! it's a really sweet story, i am excited to read what happens next!

I'm loving this story! Well paced, wide vocab, and interesting ideas. I can't wait to hear what happens next!

Loved it! It was so cool (can't find a better word to describe it), seeing Esuthain finally throw his restrain to the winds! And Lothiriel too. Keep writing!

Certh

Lovely chapter! It's so nice to see more of Imrahil's sons in it (even though it's just Amrothos). I loved how you painted the relationship between Lothiriel and her older brother. Plus, the way you had Lothiriel realise she was falling for Esuthain was so sweet, portrayed wonderfully and not rushed at all.

Certh