Nice story - I liked the pace you set, and the use of the time passages was very effective. You have a great writing style. My only complaint? Please mark it slash, or give a warning as such. Some of us find that's not our cup of tea, even if it is only in a throwaway line...

Thanks. :)

Great count. I like how you used the numbers/time to give us perspective. Good job.

Simply brilliant. The use of time stamps on all of the major events in the story was a great device and added a nice built-in suspense to it. Excellent, enjoyable work.

I'm so torn on this one. I love the mentions of the time that has passed, your writing style is unique and brilliant but oddly it's not what I would prefer to read. It's very detached, there are hardly any descriptions of scenery and most importantly emotions.

I liked how you casually slip in Neal and Peter's relationship. I also liked your use of time through out the story to show that when a loved one is harmed or even when you first meet them or realize you care about them. for some it matters how long it took to get to this exact point. I enjoyed the comment of the doctors laughing at Peter saying he'll use handcuffs if neccesary to protect Neal and the fact he's not kidding. I could see him actually doing that on the show (maybe not as a pairing) to protect Neal cause clearly he cares what happens to him. Only spelling error I found was the word "suggestion" when you should have used "suggesting". Conclusion: Your use of time was very good and for those who don't like slash they can still read it since you only mentioned their relationship a few times.

Fantastic, tense, suspenseful, wonderful.

Very cool; I love how you used the timing to move it along without a ton of detail without it seeming too choppy. It good how you describe the actions and words without delving deep into emotion, yet still include bits and pieces of their motivations. Great read; very believable!