I accidentally hit the review button before I was finished so i'll just finish up here. Ultimately Dragon-Raptor nothing I said here was addressed to you specifically i'm more or less talking about bashing as a whole.

This story, or what i was able to read was very well done and you are a talented writer. I just hope that one day bashing becomes less popular and characters are able to at least resemble the originals. (not likely seeing as it's been over a decade and they're still being written every day)

I just want stories that atleast attempt to stay true to the original while still having their own ideas, and slight changes in the pairings...is that so too much to ask for? Anyway i'm done. Rant over.

Love and peace.

Some day I am going to find the person that originally started bashing characters in their fics and I am going to punch them in the face for starting a cult following for what has got to be the single worst idea for fanfiction i've ever come across.

Even worse than inserting original character that can fix every problem, even worse then inserting yourself into a story.

Bashing as a whole makes me wonder how mentally and emotionally stable the readers and writers are.

Now of course I don't believe everyone who writes or reads stories like this are crazy but I do think that because people as a rule just seem to be followers with very little individuality that jump from trend to trend, when a few writers (who probably did have a few issues) suddenly started writing bashing fics everyone and their moms started suddenly seeing all the hidden "facts" about characters personalities in the story that they never saw before until other people told them to see it.

Dumbledore is actually an evil manipulative old man whose ultimate goal is either the control or destruction of the wizarding world and he makes voldemort seem like a saint. Ron is suddenly worse than Draco ever was suddenly screaming about mudbloods and trying to rape people(i've literally seen stories where he creates the new set of death eaters).

Ginny is almost always portrayed as either psychotic, vindictive or just outright cruel. Hell the weasleys as a whole are treated like shit suddenly becoming voldemorts biggest supporters or wanting to kill off hermione to help ginny. Draco is...draco typically I don't really care if he's bashed because it makes sense due to his actual personality.

I mean these aren't even the characters at this point. When you take a characters personality and murder it the way bashing fics do, they are no longer those characters, they are original characters that just so happen to have the same name.

The only character I've never really seen bashed is neville and thats because he was such a bitch in the first few stories that noone can really mindfuck themselves into believing he's evil too.

I dunno I guess some people just like drama, the emotional high they can get from a story like this every now and then, and I guess thats fine. .

No its the other type of readers that are the problem. It's the readers who again having no individuality suddenly think that all their favorite characters are evil that keep this bullshit popular and ruin hundreds of potentially great stories because the authors feel they need to bash everyone all the time if the story even has a chance of getting remotely popular.

Do you have ANY idea how difficult it is to find decently written stories (preferably with harry and hermione as the pairing) with no bashing? Try it sometime.

Again at the end of the day nothing I say will change anything and dammit i really try not to judge but from the outside looking in it reminds me of serial killers who as children expressed it through pictures or killing animals in their backyard.

Are these stories so popular because they let both the writers and readers express all those desires and negative personality traits that they could never show in real life?

Awesome stuff! You've got some great talent. Don't stop now though-there's more to be told!

Great Story! Can't wait to see what happens next. I have been waiting to see what would happen at Hogwarts with all the girls and Harry being together. Hope that Lily stays away from Snape, that would be...extremely gross. I also kind of feel bad for Ginny. She seems more of a victim in this story then anything. Sure she said a couple of cruel things but that can be blamed on the soul fragment and her desire for Harry is based on her mother's actions. She is pretty much permanently damaged and in love with Harry. I think that Harry and his girls should give her a break and forgive her already.

Good Chapter! Although I have noticed that you made Harry get the second least amount of OWLS.

Great Story so far! But I hope there is a good reason for Lily being alive because otherwise she would be a terrible mother for leaving her son in an abusive location and letting him think that she was dead.

Maybe you could go more in depth with tonks/moony aswell as include family visits with Hagrid. I also can't wait to see harry's Animagus form which I am presuming to be a hypogriff. I think that alog with first day of class and snape getting embarrised would prove to be an interesting chapter indeed. This story has potential to be extremly long, and could use the next few years of hogwarts. One thing I dont like about yourmfic is that you tend to bring up an interesting topic and leave it or revisit it briefly afterwards. I hopemI gave you some ideas and keep in mind I found this story on hpfanfic. I had lost all hope on the story until I came across this on fanfic. You should let the readers know that you are alive and provide a link to this page. Also it'd be appreciated if you gave updates in regards to how you are doing so we have a brief idea when to expect another chapter. Ive noticed that having a small connection with your fans/ readers definatly helps.

very good story.
the characters are very well done an I really like the plot.

I have to disagree, the way you describe Dumbledore, he is the embodiment of evil, evil of the worst sort.
He is, as you describe him, neither naive nor well meaning.
The motti you have made him live by are "good" only on the outside, because they need to be tempered and he is neither trying nor willing to do that. I have not seen wisdom in his actions so far.
Senility surely is one of his problems but the core of him being evil is to fold.
His unwillingness and inability to question his own judgement and motivations makes him a classical tyrant.
And his disregard for other peoples welfare, live and goals make him worse, they make him into an egomaniac megalomaniac of even worse proportions than Voldemort.

I really, really heat him in this story.

Great writing

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I am not trying to flame honestly I am not, but this needs a humor tag…

Again I am sorry but I can't really take any of this seriously, because of all the before mentioned reasons and now you have Hermione stop a rape and then she is shocked by the number of points deducted and how unpleasant the detention is going to be? really? is there lead in the pipes at Hogwarts? that is like sentencing a rapist to cleaning public toilets for 2 hours a day for 4 months and fining him 400 monopoly dollars.

maybe maybe Hogwarts is Dumbledores personal rape and murder friendly fiefdom but how has this information not worked its way to the papers and parents why would anyone send their kid there? and why would any former Slytherin parent let their daughter within a hundred miles of the Slytherin common room?

again so far not a bad story but…
ya this still cracks me up, the only people worried about the soon to be uncontrollable rapist running around the school are three students, when it sounds like if Harry had been sorted in to Slytherin no one would even notice anything happened to Harry because he would just be raping people like a normal Slytherin.
and again they seem to think if Hermione can't find the cure all hope is lost, no professional healer could possibly have learned anything about this curse since that book was written.

"Past breakfast!" Daphne told her as she settled down in a chair. "McGonagall's worried sick about you!"
- wait wait wait… don't you see the problem here? McGonagall is worried about Hermione but has not even batted an eye over Harry's situation? She does remember the whole no cure, raping, and death thing right? furthermore why are Susan and Daphne treating Hermione like she is studying to hard for a test and trying to get her to stop? It is almost like they want Harry to die, or as if they think saving his life is not worth losing a little sleep over.

"I'll have words with young Mister Malfoy."
- what an ummm… ?appropriate? response to finding out he likely used a curse on one of her students that seems to ALWAYS result in the death of the cursed…

I have tried to read this story several times and I always got caught up on the fact that no one seems to give a damn about someone casting a curses called the 'rape cures' in the hallway, especially when it is apparently incurable and fatal… oh well just another day at Hogwarts… furthermore no one seems to think it might be a good idea to remove Harry from public areas?
and Susan can't be bothered to write a letter to her aunt? not just to say Hay this happened and might warrant some auror attention, but maybe to see there is some cure known to actual medical professionals? McGonagall just goes to lunch and does and says nothing? "Oh Hermione is on the case, no need to worry she is after all the brightest witch of her age, and she will probably punish Draco also…"

having said all that the story does seem well written thus far. but if this is the plot you may want to add a humor or comedy tag because this is the only way either of these things would happen.

I could not help but to notice that Hermoine's aunt was only mentioned that one time, are we going to meet her or is she only a b-class/background character?

Also from one writer to another, it is always a good thing to write down your ideas so that you can structure your after how you want to incorperate said ideas.

Signed: DVSP.

This story is awesome! Update, please!