HOT! That's all I can say! The flow of the story is excellent and you kept them both in character! :D

interesting, though for Eda- I reckon Revy's boss.

Nice! Yeah, I'm not sure how serious Revy is either when she says that stuff in the manga. I think she probably put just enough truth and lie in it to make Jane wide-eyed and lay off Rock. I bet Revy would be willing to switch for Eda. Eda doesn't strike me as a complete bottom or top, besides quite often the person on the bottom has more control than the person on top. Well, depending on the situation anyway. _