This story truly does Iwasawa's character justice.

The way you put her thoughts on every aspect of her life and afterlife were perfect.

I can feel her loneliness between each lines as it goes deeper, shallow, only to go even deeper.

I truly hate how that beer bottle had to hit her.

That hit took away Iwasawa's only hope to break free from her cursed cycle of abusive family environment.

Many times I wished Iwasawa just hide behind the wall as usual on that night so she didn't get hit on the head.

Then again, if she did that, it might be her mother who died.

...I truly don't want this thing happen in real life. The government and people need to stay sharp for poor real-life children like her.

But I was even more surprised that you are actually like her.

You're fine though now, aren't you?

Like I said before, i don't want Iwasawa's tragedy happen in reality, including yours.

Sorry for being sentimental. I love this story :)

Iwasawa F-T-W!

This is great for a one shot. You got her character exactly right, and it is kind of gut wrenching, but then, she doesn't exactly have a happy story, either.

Nice job!

This one of the most well-written shots I have seen yet. Just a couple things, you might want to mention how Iwasawa's guitar came with her to this world (whether you can come up with a reason or not), otherwise it seems like "Wha? Where'd the guitar come from?"

and maybe (although this may be better as a story of its own) get into a little more about how GirldDeMo formed

I'm gonna actually log in and review this. This story is just too good to not to log in.

Anyway, I loved this story. Iwasawa was one of my favorite characters and I was sad when she disappeared. This story represented her greatly and got more into her character. It was a great read! )

It was heartwarming and I believe in your ending message. It made me smile.

hey.. i really like your story

you did a great job there