I like it...keep it up!
Jen

Kewl. And twisted. I like. A story set in the DA Universe but without any known characters. I like.

Hope she enjoyed going dancing after. Lol.

S.

It's very well written, but I don't like it. I'm not sayng you shouldn't have posted it, especially since you did warn that it was dark, but I just don't see characters withthat relationship to pain as attractive and interesting, and so the story isn't as appealing as those with characters I can at least at some level like better.

Wow, that was an amazing chapter. I can't find the right words of what I want to say, just utterly amazing. I know you put the reader in the story w/o background and stuff, maybe you could incorperate things like her name, where she is, and stuff like that in the next chapter. Very good though, just really really really well written. Vivid, and lifelike.

I loved it, torture, non show character and you didn't name her did you? I don't think so so another point, I'm weird like 's original and payback for the X5's is always sweet :evil laugh: