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nani?

where is it!

where is the rest?

i think you need to look again at this chapter (chp 5). whoever you had review it...you left the reviews there, and it's really really confusing. consider revising and reposting.

Hehe, I think you left your beta reader's comments in this part! :) This is very interesting.

Like Moonelf pointed out, you left a bunch of comments in here, and the editing seemed a bit choppy. (chapter 5)

But that aside...

MORE! Write more! That last scene in chapter 5... I need to know what happens! You write action sequences so well. Keep it up, and put that next chapter up soon! _

You already know I love all your work to bits. You never cease to impress.

You accidently left in a beta reader's comments, It was kinda distracting. But LOVED the story!

Wow... yeah... get next part out soon, k? You got me in such supense and wondering...

nice story, lovely writing, and so on.

fox.

Wheeeeee! I got a bit of adrenalne from that! Okay, now you MUST POST THE NEXT CHAPTER! It's necessary to life, I tell you! To LIFE! Okay, sorry about that weird outburst. BUt you inspired it! So there.

- Ruechan

Thanx for posting the next chapter earlier! But couldn't you have posted the two chapters at the SAME time? ::sob:: You're killing me here! Aya is going to wake up soon ne? I sure hope so. Not like it would make a difference, considering you've already written the next chapter but yeah, you get the picture. Well, I'll be expecting that next chapter soon! Ja! _

Write more! _ plz?

NOOOOOOOO! Post more! You're soooooo evil! But I like the story. -

Dragonflyred7-

Wai! This is so good! Yay! Hehe. Okay, sorry to get a fangirl-esque on you, but... Aw, you know how it is. Alright, now all you have to do is write more! And then we will all be very happy!

- Rue chan

p.s. if you feel like it, I have about three fics up on FFnet, and I love it when people leave me comments! So if you feel like reading some stuff, I would really appreciate it if you'd read mine! _*

You write Aya-chan very well. :) This chapter kept me just as interested as the last- come on, don't be stingy! Post the rest!

You already have four chapters written and you've only posted two of them? Can we say, "Cruel and unusual punishment!" I want the next chapters pleeeeaaassseee! I love your writing and I wanna know if Ran and Omi are ok! Please post more soon! Ja! _