This is a great exploration of Naoi before he becomes the deputy head of the student council. I like how you portrayed his thoughts, and the words you picked were just right, not exaggerated and rather straightforward, giving the reader the same emptiness Naoi feels. The last line was my favourite, because of the strength of those words. I also loved how you said that both of the brothers died and only his father's dream survived. Short but quite well done (: