I must say i stumbled across this and frankly am impressed at your improved writing skills. I found the first chapter well thought out and captured interest from the start with the use of narration. Well done in that. I am putting the story on alert as i do not have time tonight to finish and do want to see where you take it. Again...well done.

Ahhh! A cliffy. Wonder if anyone saw themshare a kiss(although it was slghtly one-sided). Gossip will be spreading. Can't wait for your next chapter.

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Interestjg idea for an AU/alternate ending fic.

Snape/OC haven't read any of those yet.

Can't wait to see how the story turns out.

Spelling error "write her an apply" should be "write her a reply"

Rate 7.9/10

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I'm glad to see that Severus finally realized what had been staring him in the face and instead of questioning his own motives or whether or not he deserved it, promptly went and told her how he felt instead of stringing her along.

I'm enjoying your story very much. It's a breath of fresh air to find a story written to appeal to grown-up adults, too often the stories that are rated 'mature' are filled with smut written by girls who are too young and inexperienced to know what they are writing about. That's not to say that I don't enjoy well written smut, but i want to read about things I know from experience actually happen and not about what somebody saw in a porn video.

Anyway your story is rated T and is about real, grown up adults who express themselves as adults and have adult hang-ups and adult problems. I like the subtlety all the main characters use in their approach to the plot and each other, especially the way Lady Prince used to tell Claire that she would approve of a match between Claire and Severus. It's slow moving, but that makes each progressive step that Claire and Severus make more delightful to read and it makes it more delicious to contemplate their future together.

You are writing a dramatic character study, not an action/adventure for kids, or a weepy maudlin teen romance and that appeals to me. I think you have the skill to do it well and I plan to continue reading to see how things work out for Severus and Claire.

That is such a great story! I like it very much! Just don't make it fluffy please! And update sooon!

very cute! well thought out! Update soon!

This is good, however you really need to work on your grammer. For example : 'would of'...should be 'would have', and instead of using 'and' all the time, use commas to break up sentences xD

Aside from that, this is very good :)