More please it's aswome.

Wow, short. If I may say, a compacted first chapter is dramatic, BUT A SHORT SECOND ONE JUST MAKES YOU LOOK LAZY. Again, I'm trying to be helpful. Still, I'm getting a feel for the characters, and that's always important *glares at a nearby, horribly mauled Twilight book*.

Okay, decent setup, INTERESTING STORYLINES, and somewhat dark, but I really do have to say SPELLCHECK IS YOUR FRIEND! I say this out of friendship. Poor spelling and grammar can ruin even the greatest story. Other than that, you're on par.

I'm interested! Write some more!