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that was really great! i liked it! (though it was a lil ooc! but not too much!) i really liked it! it was good!

it is sooo sweet

Max is 10 years old right?

This was really excellent, and original! My favorite line, "Meh, a purple, three-headed, fire-breathing unicorn wouldn't surprise him." haha

Great job on this story! I was pleased to see that you remembered to have Max liking Jeb and wanting to make him proud. I believe other people might forget that kind of thing.

I also say kudos to you mentioning that their wings would be weak from lack of wing usage. Great job!