I have only just found this story, and I couldn't stop reading it! I loved this show when I was younger, and I think you captured Devon and John's voices perfectly. The exchanges between them are definitely true to character. I love that despite their feelings being out in the open, you still made them fight. It wouldn't be these two without a lot of fighting!

Sorry it has taken me so long to finish my review. This was a very fun story. It's made me want to watch the epsiodes again. I loved your characterizations. There were many powerful and moving moments throughout this piece. I think my favorite scene was when John tells Devon it was his dream and then they slowly realize what happened. Great stuff and very believeable. Thanks for posting, it was great!

What a fun idea having Alonzo bring them onto the dreamplane. Great chapter!

I love the idea of adding 'missing' scenes to the episodes. I've read stories like this for another fandom and it's a terrific idea. I think you've captured Devon and Danziger perfectly and I can't wait to see how this turns out!

What a great story! Such wonderful details and so true to the characters. It's impressive that you've captured the show so well. I always enjoy the way you write Devon and Danziger.

Joan

This was beautiful.

Joan

Trying not to give anything away here. This was heartbreaking yet very in character.

Joan

I love the situation you've created here. You dropped a nice little hint in an earlier chapter that Devon and John were visiting the Dream Plane on their own power. Poor Alonzo - what's he going to do?

Joan

No matter how many versions of curing Devon I read, I still get caught up in them. What a joyful time. Will Devon be able to pursue her dreams?

Joan

I always hated that they left the show like this. How ironic that Danziger doesn't have the camp vote on the decision to leave but you've explained his reasons beautifully.

Nice job with Alonzo too. He meant well.

Joan

What a beautiful scene. I'm excited that Danziger seems to be working up the nerve to say something to her.

Joan

I love all the little details you add. The rationale for why four had to go on the trip and why those particular four. Devon and John both trying to understand their "dreams".

Joan

Great way to tie the dreamplane communication into established events. Great use of Morgan too.

I especially liked this line:

that without John around to keep Devon's raging egomania in check, she would probably impose martial law or anoint herself Queen of G889 or some-such nonsense.

That had me laughing.

Joan

Great way to address the issues brought up in Brave New Pacifica. I'm excited to read what's next.

Joan

Great start. Nice to see Devon more vulnerable. I love the way you're incorporating this so nicely within the time line/episodes of the show.

Joan