Hello, long time no hear... it's good to see you back in action_

sorry if I'm not giving much of a review here, but I haven't read the whole thing yet...

Really, really awesome story. I'm a huge fan of Fallout 3. I hope you update soon!

YOur work is awesome I can't wait till the next chapter and you better not make me do it for to long.

Oh long chapter.

And Charon will appear(

Yay! I hope you give him more dialogue options then they do in the game, you know?

Well cant wait to see what happens next(

Nice chapter :D ...You know, you have a point- most Fallout 3 fanfiction DOES seem to include the whole "recruiting" Charon thing. (As a companion, I find Fawkes more useful, but that's just my opinion)

I kind of freaked out the first time I used the Fat Man on that stupid Behemoth. That weapon is amazing, though, and fun to use... from a distance.

I think you're right about the Hippocratic Oath; if anybody knew about it, let alone swore to uphold it, it would have been James.

You're doing a fantastic job so far - I can't wait to see more!

I've never read one that touched on events pre F3, it's good!

You've gotten off to a great start. Already I'm eagerly anticipating Liz's future adventures in the wasteland, like how she'll get on with the dangers of DC, Tranquility Lane, and of course finally reuniting with her good old dad.

Starting off the story with an introspective chapter about James was a great idea; it’s refreshing to learn a little about his feelings regarding his daughter and the work he left behind back at the purifier. I also liked how you described things, like the sickly sweet smell of bodies in the Super Duper Mart and Moriarty's snarling like a wild animal. To make this a balanced review however, I'll also list a couple of things which sort of irked me.

Firstly: Nuka-Cola in the vault. I'm not entirely sure of this, but I highly doubt that Vault 101, with its "No one ever enters" policy, would have any Nuka-Cola. Sure, people have escaped before, and there have been scouting parties, but Nuka-Cola is a pre-war drink, and it would be almost impossible to manufacture more in the Wild West-like Capital Wasteland, as opposed to more civilized places like New Vegas or the New California Republic. Also, if I remember right, Fallout 1 and 2 describe Nuka-Cola as 'warm and flat'. The implication there is that most, if not all Nuka-Cola is scavenged from the pre-war vending machines and looted from the stores and factories which once sold/manufactured them. Therefore, all Nuka-Cola in the wastes is at least 200 years old, so how could it get in the vault? (Unless of course the vault comes equipped with a machine which mixes brand-new cola... in which case my entire argument is rendered moot.)

Secondly: instant stimpacks. Just as my first point, this isn’t something that has any real impact on your writing or the quality of the story; it’s just something which makes me frown whenever I see it in Fallout fan fiction. So please bear with me as I explain. I don’t know how much you know about the upcoming Fallout: New Vegas, but in the game a setting called “Hardcore Mode” has been added, which, among other things, changes the effect of stimpacks so that they heal bodily damage over time rather than instantaneously. To me, this seems a hundred times more plausible than a chemical which, upon injection, miraculously knits wounds and repairs broken/crippled limbs. I say again however, this is your story and I do not mean to implore you to change it, I merely wish to bring to light some of the bits which made me scratch my head with bemusement. I’ve read sillier things, of course. I remember one Fallout fanfic in which the main character’s pip-boy was equipped with a device which scanned all the items she wished to take and then ‘warped’ them into some kind of separate or parallel dimension for storage; clearly it was written by someone who took the inventory screen a bit too seriously. Even today, years later, I still have to laugh when I think of it, or else cry.

Ignoring those irrelevant tidbits above however, I think that you are at the start of something special here, and I hope that you will see it through to the end. I will do my best to wait for your next chapter, but bear in mind that if you take too long I shall track you down using your IP address and force you to continue writing (a la Annie Wilkes in Stephen King’s ‘Misery’). ;) I will apologise only once more for the blocks of text above: Sorry, Stella Anon, for those blocks of text above.

It'll only make sense that Elizabeth would have hard time parting with new people considering the only people she had she doesnt have now. I loved how this chapter ended, I could just picture it happening(

Great chapter! Cant wait to see what happens next!

Found your story today, really good start and looking forward to more. As for minefield, like to see how she would react to the sniper there, and if her BB gun experience helped with her new rife. But mainly I would go with how you feel. Looking forward to your next chapter.

Good chapter.

I love the first part with the bunch of qoutes, it was awesome(

Picturing James sneaking a smoke in the reactor made me smile. He must be pretty stealthy to avoid all the engineering and maintainance crews that would be lurking about.

Learning what was going through James' mind the night he left makes for a wonderful opener to your story; you set the stage and describe your character her fathers eyes, rather than the slightly awkward self-descriptions found in most fanfics. This is a fantastic beginning. I hope you continue it!

Well written first chapter. Keep it up!

Helllo please write kind of original stories not this dribble u know something with action and even some romance like try having your character and Sarah Lyons get together in some romance yes this was written by a guy

Good start. I loved hearing a little part of James thoughts. I love fallout, its awesome!

Im glad you showed that James had guilt, a lot of the time when people write a little thing in James POV, they forget about the guilt and like you did, a point were he will think he shouldnt have left..

Its a good story and cant wait until I get to see more of Elizabeth..