O-O I had a craving for Tidus-Wakka, and there aren't that many out there. Nice job! Good grammar and such!

It was okay so far. There was a good beginning, but...

I didn't like how you HARDLY DESCRIBED THE SURROUNDINGS.

Tell me what things look like! I don't care if I should already know what the characters look like, I don't care if anyone else says that the descriptions take up time, DO IT.

Here's a tip; Insert character descriptions subtly. Don't use a whole paragraph on describing someone. EXAMPLE:

Instead of saying this:

Jean had blonde hair, diamond blue eyes, and a dazzling white smile...

Say it more like this:

The electric hue of her hair was maximized by the setting sun, and he couldn't take his eyes off of her chewed fingernails that patted the ground besided her...

Insert them as the story goes on so that you don't overload.

YOU HAVE NO CLUE HOW MUCH POTENTIAL THIS HAS!

Also, I liked how long the chapters are. They aren't LONG, but the paragraph size makes it worth reading. I think that you used spell check on this, am I right? If you did, good job, I'm always harping on people to do that. (In other words, good grammar and spelling). There were some mistakes for polishing, but it isn't important. I'm pretty sure that I'll be able to read it with a misused 'they're' here and they're...;) hahaha.

Good story. Good idea. The other guys were half-right; You're on your way to being skilled. (Right now, me and you are about on the same level).

8.5/10

OMG I NEED MORE! I love WakkaxTidus but there are so few out there. And this one is amazing and just needs to be continued!

I like this story a lot. I generally really like Wakka/Tidus anyway, and I like how you haven't done the random "I love you" speech completely out of the blue. Very nice work here.

The only thing is make sure you keep the "camera" in the same place through the whole story. Even with third person, you need to worry about that. It seemed as though you were on Tidus for the first part of this and abruptly switched to Wakka and then back again.

dont stop now! Tidus/Wakka is the best slash, not sure why they just fit together! please write more!

Awww. How sweet. And that, to me, is the worst thing. I discover you aren't even real, to doubt your existance, to wonder if the way you think/feel is the same as others...

Don't end it now!

This is *great*! I'm a die hard Tidus/Wakka fan here (if I actually knew the ffX plot It'd be writing away as we speak) and this is excellent!

Please consider more! I beg you!

You're a great writer, I hope all the encouragement you get keeps you writing, I hope to see MORE for you soon! *jumps up and down expectantly*

Peace out!

H.G.

Awww...thats so sad! I always thought FFX was really sad, and ack! ...tidus was done really well in this one )

Nice one! Very sweet. :) Good work, ya?

WAI! *jumps around happily* I've been looking all over for a Wakka X Tidus! You must continue this story. It's very good! _

wow...this is such a good fic...and it sounds like you do the same thing in English class that I do...

AHHH! Cute. And Wakka/Tidus, whooo! If you do not write another chapter, youse'll be visited by the Assasin Tonberry. ...yeah. DOn't mind me. Great chapter, well thought out and perfectly in character.

Wai! Tidus/Wakka! I've been looking so hard for one-even to the point of penciling in one at the moment. ; Thankyouthankyouthankyou.

Oh I hope you'll write more! I really like this story so far.

This is good, cuz everyone's in character very nicely! Please continue!