I liked this one the first time I read it... Now I LOVE it! A LOT! I can't wait to see how this one goes!

I liked the revision! I think I can see spots where you expanded it a bit. It definitely adds more depth to the story!

I'm pretty sure Yggdrasil thought this through a little more, and I don't remember if there was the scene with Yuan, Kratos, and Lloyd in the original. I liked it here though, even if it was there before.

I'm curious to what else you will change later on. I can't wait to find out!

I didn't read the first one you had of this, so I don't know what's different and what's not, but the plot sounds very interesting so far. This is another of your Cru-Lloyd ones right? It's going good so far but I keep thinking that this one is going to be similar to HRP, then again this is only the first chapter so I guess I still have to wait and see what happens. Here's hoping you update again soon!