Really great story so far. holds up FanFiction Bowl More please?

Ok, I love this story. It makes me laugh so had at times. Please write more! There's just one thing. Please read over your work! There've just been a few times that you sentences don't make sense, even after I've read them ten times! So please just make sure that all your sentances are coherent! Thank you for listening. Now, I have one other request. Would you mind if I used your heartlink idea? It's for a Naruto fanfic I'm writing and I'd like to use it for a few of my characters. That said, I really applaud this work. It's one of the best fanfictions I've read. I'm really thankful that your writing is at least in the correct format. Some things I've read don't have proper grammer or correct formatting. Sorry it this bugs you but my mom's an english teacher so the rules of proper english have been forced upon me since a young age. And there's no escaping them once they have you. Thank you for listening.

holy cow that was a interesting, cute, sweet first chapter.

wicked cool! it's great so far keep adding to it. i've got a new e-mail address: sorry i haven't been in touch. i'm going to start working on a voltron series in a few days. hope to talk to you soon!

Just how much Lance bashing is there in this fic, because it's really funny to see Lance get whats coming to him.

I read all the new chapters. THEY ARE COOL! I can't believe that nut-case Hagar would be crazy enough to try and poison Keith! I just have one question on that front: Were the slaves rescued? I mean Oran didn't blow THEM up did he?

The entire swimming part was cool. I think it's a great story, PLEASE finish it.

Hi, I would have written sooner, but the story caught my eye and I wanted to read all nine chapters first. Here are my comments:

1. I think the story is pretty good except for when you kill Sven. From the entire show my favorite Space Explorer list is Keith at #1, Sven at #2, Pidge at #3, Hunk and #4, and Lance at #5. (Sorry, I digress)

2. I think it's cool to see a side of the V team that the show never tried to explore. The story you wrote gives them more character.

3. I thought it was sooo cool to see some one nail Nanny to the wall. She needs a vacation (maybe one that lasts until Allura's 35) and should take some time off.

(oops, digressing again)

4. Lotor is getting what he should have a LONG time ago. That made the story even better.

5. The story is cool so far, PLEASE finish it.

6. I almost fell out of my chair when I got to the part about Keith getting drunk. THAT was a laugh riot!

7. Because I don't get to come to this web site much often, PLEASE e-mail when you post chapter 10. My e-mail is

Thanks for letting me comment,

Deborah

This story is really hot. Keep up the good work.

Excellent Story, keep it coming, i can hardly wait for the next chapter.