I want you to look at this site. Sailor Star Super may have already told you it. Aparently the webmistress has taken a look of the story.

Finish this story and just give it to the girl. Don't listen to the flamers. I know it's been about 4 years, but try to finish this story. Run a spell check. Saw a coupel of errors and if try to keep this story in either past or present tense. If you want help with a title, I can give you that. email me, or PM me later. I'll give you some ideas. Tell me a bit more of this story. Who are these mysterious senshi?

First off: if you want to add an OC, please don't make them senshi. There are enough of those in canon. Maybe a friend of one of the senshi (other than Sailor Moon) who has the power to fight due to some sort of connection to the Moon Kingdom?

Second: grammar. Don't be randomly switching between past and present tense. It can cause mental whiplash in readers. Learn what sort of punctuation goes where. Ditto for capital letters. Please, please, no caplocks of rage.

Third: 'thanx'? No, no and no. It's 'thanks.' Absolutely no netspeak in anything other than chatrooms, threads, forums and IM.

Fourth: the descriptions of your senshi are more than six times longer than your average paragraphs. That is one of the sure signs of a Mary Sue. If you want the readers to know what she looks like, maybe in the first transformation say something like "they caught a glimps of a strange [insert discription here, limit it to three adjectives at a time] tiara." Continue with a short [again, a three adjective limit] description of some part of their outfits after each trasformation. If you go on for paragraphs about clothing and hair, no one will really give a crap and just skip it.

Five: the dialogue is quite juvenile. They sound like middle- or elementary-schoolers. I haven't heard anyone say 'wimp' since fifth or sixth grade.

This sucks. Big time. You have used NO punctuation, and there are misspelt words all over the place. Fuckity fuck kid, your charas are mary sues!

Well...that was interesting. Next chapter please.

-Snow Stalker-

ur story is ok. well, the beginning was a bit boring but as i got closer to the end it got more interesting. i just realized that my lastest chapter on my story is kinda like that. u know with new transformation and a sword with ancient language and other stuff. plz don't think i copied u. i just read this today. i posted the chapter yesterday. :) n e wayz, i hope u keep on writing.