Aaaaah please continue this, it's soo good!

This story made the doujinshi sooo much clearer for me, it's very well written good job! please continue it!

I am thoroughly enjoying this fic, especially the fact that it is first person. thx for posting/writing!

So I actually read this dojin on accident. Like, I saw some pages but they were in Japanese, so I had no idea what was actually going on. Then I ran across a translation and started reading and when it became clear what was actually going on it was like OH GODS NO but by then it was too late because I'd already seen the later pages and knew what was going to happen and now understood what it meant, including the fact that apparently at the end, Mokuba had been kidnapped and forced into child prostitution. I totally freaked out and cried for hours. So anyways I obviously didn't read this fic, but assuming it follows that manga, you severely need a warning for Bakura raping Marik and forcing him into prostitution and also a warning for pedophilia and forced childhood prostitution.

This is an awesome story cant wait for the next chapter owo

I enjoyed that alright...-drooling-

I hope you continue! -whines- Im not taking no for an answer!...Neither "I dont think so" or -says about 200005552000-...LOL i CHEATED! Now that was hawt xDD This is like rape...sassy ;P

OMG! SO THAT'S WHERE YOU'VE BEEN! I was wondering where you vanished off to. Ah well you gave me enough time to write two oneshots of my own and post them up XD. It's not a bad thing. I can tell you tried really hard for this chappy! And you did very well. I love how detailed the scene is and how you're portraying what Malik feels and how irritated and scared he is. In the doujin we see a bit of it, but not in that much detail. But Oh my gah you left it at a cliffy yet again, it's like you're in love with em! D: Ah well I look forward to seeing the next chapter!

Keep up the great work!

BleedingStrawberries

imma reviewing! you seemes sad cause you only had 11 reviews. that isn't that bad. i've seen people with only 5 chapters and like 1 review. i probably won't review again just cause im lazy like that but i'm still reading! have no doubts!

I likeeeeeeee it!

Mooooooooaar pweeeese? X3

This story is just scream for a reviewww! xD

Omg! YOU UPDATED! XD It's a great surprise!

Anyways... YAY FOR HOT SCENE! Can't wait for next chapter! I'm so glad it's finally getting to that part! I have the "Queen of Kabukichou" doujin too! I got really upset when I discovered there wasn't much Bakura X Malik. P.

What can I say? First person written very well. The portrayal of Malik's feelings are done really well! Gosh this fic is so good it's hard for me to pin point all the good points! The reviews all sound the same XDDDD Someone will suspect I copy and paste the reviews! XDDDD.

What can I say? Keep the great work!

BleedingStrawberries

(sorry that my reviews are always so crap XD)

Ukh you're mean to just leave it like that. I've read the doujin twice but still cannot resist to see it in this story since you make everything goes rather slowly which is good! Update soon plz!

bakura bakura bakura. what would we do without you to make stories sexy and interesting! love the chapter! poor marik. cant wait to see what happens next! PLZ update soon!

I like the story so far but can you send me the web address for the doujinshi so I may see it.

XD Yet another cliffy p Try not to keep doing that because it makes the story lose it's tension and the readers lose interest. But because you've only done it twice. It's fine.

Obviously I know what happens and it basically follows through the doujin. But remember it is also your own fic. So maybe you can change some aspects of it.(it's just a suggestion) But apart from that I really enjoyed the chapter. Oh another thing, you could actually try to write a chapter in Bakura's perspective instead. That would be quite interesting too. What he thought of Malik and stuff. You write first person really well.

Keep up the good work!

BleedingStrawberries

Hooray for the second chapters and cliffys XDDD. Obviously your portrayal of Malik is still as good as the first chapter. I really like how you made it more realistic, how he was job hunting through six months. Obviously the readers of the doujin would have been wondering why he was wandering the streets hungry. I also really like how you portray his uncertainty of going along with them very well. I can't wait for the next part. It's my favourite part P.

Keep up the great work!

BleedingStrawberries