|Reviews for Broken Dreams|
| teentitan42 12/16/12 . chapter 1
It sounds good. Maybe you continue and write about his mother coming over and him shouting all of this out. Literally my favorite part of the movie is when his little sister comes over and doesn't say anything. I thought this was a beautiful moment.
| thisisforyou 11/23/10 . chapter 1
Mmmn. Almost exactly what I imagined he'd be thinking.
I would have liked a bit more description, the sentence at the end about the tear was good! Maybe if you'd put something like that in between each paragaph?
But it was very good, you got into his head nicely.
| hp-not harry potter 11/16/10 . chapter 1
Alright, first of all, get rid of the caps rape. Second, too short, third, unoriginal. Explanation: the description of his thoughts as described here are things already given in the movie, no need to voice them out loud, they're obvious and to be honest, almost an exact copy of what happens in the movie. Fourth and lastly, the silent tear is both cliche and irrelevant, it isn't a script you know.
| Under the Willow Tree 10/2/10 . chapter 1
Oh. My. God. SAMI! Why didn't you TELL me about this? Lolzers, sounds very angsty... Luv Dani :)