This was a great story, but why couldn't Jesse have had padding over all his body? And why did you have to have such a sad ending? Why couldn't Jesse keep her? Great story, otherwise!
Jesse'sBIGGEST!Fan

Yay!Something decent to read instead of these romance gush fic.

hi

I like your story I thought that it was great. Can you send me a copy to my e-mail thanks

Hi! I've been reading DM fics to avoid revising (damned GCSEs!) but this is the first time i've reviewed. I liked the relationship between Jesse and Ally, she was a good character and I liked the way you tried to mould the gang into a new family for her. Good stuff! Good luck with your GCSEs!

Hi. Sorry, it's taken me ages to sort my life out after a vaction (especially deprived from sun when coming back to this English weather!) But i've finished the rest of your story and i love it! You've written it really well with a good plot. And i love Ally. You deserve every review you've got from this story. Please write something else soon!

If this review has been sent twice, then sorry but if not, this sentence doesn't exist. ;-)

Halina

(P.S, good luck in those GCSE's. You're taking them next month or something aren't you?)

Heya...(this is flizz without the fox), your soooo good to us at reviewing LSBAC i decided to return the favour.

Although i have no idea about diagnosis whatever i just treated it like a novel and i think i got the jist of it...anyway you're really talented, ever though about spreading your wings and taking a dive into the BSB world or SlashFiction? You should.

Oh well if you do i for one will be there reviewing religeously. Just a major thank you for being so DAMN supportive, you're reviews mean the most to us (me anyway - i can't speak for fox but i'm sure she is just as appriciative.).

Okay buh-bye for now, love *FliZz*.

P.S rock on girlfriend!

Oops, pressed enter before I was done! Tehe, well, good luck on your exams. Can't wait to see a revised version along with your next story! (But keep up with your schoolwork!)

Alana

Nice ending, but it needs to be developed more. But overall, bravo!

I thought that was a good end to the story. It was very final. However, you did leave some questions unanswered. I suppose we can fill in the holes on our own. Another great story, Becca. Keep 'em up (though, uh, not *quite* this long :). I expect to see more from you ASAP. Thanks!

jenben

Excellent story. I really did enjoy it and I thought that the epilogue rounded it off nicely.

I really enjoyed this story, the epilogue was short, but sweet, and finished it off nicely. Have fun with your GCSE's! I am sure you will do fine.

Tracy

GCSE's? What are those? Oh, that right! You're from England. You have different exams than Americans (sorry, it's early in the morning for me). I actually think this is getting better. Granted, it isn't as deep as it could be, but you're delving a bit more into how Jesse and Ally feel and I thought it was the right move to send Ally to Amanda's house. She needed a woman to talk to, especially a woman who is a mother. Keep it up, Becca. I look forward to your next chapter. Thanks,

jenben

IT WAS GOOD SO FAR! Finish soon!

Oh, that last one was a great chapter. I like that one of the bullets hit Jesse's leg; it just came as a surprise. As though Eric is some sort of really bad shot. It made me grin. In answer to your question, a Mary Sue is a self-insertion character (you'll get the lingo soon). When an author writes fan fiction and adds an important charcter to a story that isn't part of the cast of the television show, and that character seems to resemble the author, it's a Mary Sue. She is almost always of the same gender as the writer, witty, smart, placed into an interesting situation, and develops a close friendship with or romantic feelings for a character(s). Becca, I'm really enjoying your stories. You know that. Keep it up. Thanks,

jenben

I like, I really do. I really like the way you develop plot. But I have a pointer or two. As the story progresses, your writing seems to get weak and a bit sloppy. It seems like you're rushing through it, but, frankly, I'm glad you are! You know how to keep us on the edge of our seats! But I have a suggestion. Once you finish the story, put it aside for awhile. Then come back to it. Read over it, and make corrections. Make it as perfect as you can. After that's done, repost it and do it again, until you get bored with i! I'm on about the fifth revamping of one of my stories, and it does take a lot of work, I know, but it's well worth it! Keep up the good work!

Alana