Talk about disproportionate retribution much, right?

Times like this make me wish I had played the game more often...

And so the adventure begins...

Kinda puts the term 'Wedding Crashers' into a whole new meaning, don't it?

It's been a while since I heard of dear old Jazzy-boy here; now, he's in fanfiction awaiting to be wed...

Quoting William Shakespeare, "the world is a stage..."

Good for you, man... good for you...

lol...nice chapter man...and about spaz...he really needs to be put on a leash like a dog...with an unlimited amount of rope...lol.

i am sure jazz will surely beat him up next time...lol.

awsome!

Hey there! Sorry for the late review but all kinds of things have been happening that take my time away.

Anyway, about this chapter... *prepare for praises and criticism* P

I love how you make it seem like the most perfect day ever in the beginning. Honestly, your detail is amazing. I love it when writers take the time bring the reader into the setting. Though sometimes you start describing everything and that's okay, but it takes a little away from the main scene.

The way the queen is portrayed is hilarious! A fairly large, grumpy, protective mother with a short fuse...pretty much sums up every mom on a bad day. Though I'll never tell my mom that...

I can't wait to find out more about this Devan person/turtle/guy(he seems like a kind, generous, and level headed person to me, NOT), and of the fate of our heroes! Seriously what a twist, locking up the main character before the adventure even begins! Good chapter my friend! ...Though the 'smirked a smile' bit threw me off a bit...:-P

Very well written person who I have never met before! *shifty eyes*

I love the way you discribe the settings and the characters; descriptive without getting too wordy and lifelike without going anatomic. I can actually picture your characters and not get them confused because of how they are described when they first enter the scene.

The dialogue is just so... you! I could really imagine you saying most of the things in this story. The cheerful banter between Jazz and Spaz (which is a lovely name for a brother D)makes a somewhat bad situation (because really, who needs a ring THAT big?)into a laughable family moment. That brings up another thing, the story! As you know, I am unaware of the Jazz Jackrabbit storyline, but through only one chapter, you have filed me in on an adventurous amazing backstory of your characters.

... hmmm I really should stop now... I'm going to continue reading the next chapter and then you will hear from me again stranger who totally didn't show me this story.

:D Finally got to read this!

I don't think it was too detailed. It was detailed enough though that I knew what was happening! (Don't bag on yourself! This was good!)

I didn't know rabbits ate birds...that kinda scared me...:P

Spaz is Spazzy, which is of course good.

Nice job, keep up the good work!

Xamem-The Heart of Oblivion

Its a good start :) but I wonder where you want to go with this as an adventure humor story.