Gods, your writing just keeps getting better. If the game had been scripted this well, it would be getting revered as the greatest of all Final Fantasies. The degree to which EVERYONE is in-character, yet are so much...greater than they were in the games is astounding. Cid's banter is on par with a character from a George R.R. Martin novel! And Vayne...I don't think I've ever quite seen a character like him before in any form of media. Astounding.

Are you planning for Vayne to ascend to becoming The Undying at some point?

LARSA
EGGS
MORE CIVILIZED MANNER

LAUGHING.
OH LARSA BABY YOU CUTIE,

I love the dinner banter. It's all so very in-character. This storyline has writing that is many orders of magnitude greater than that of the actual game! Vayne, the walking time-bomb and future Undying One, asks Penelo to be his advisor on Rabinastrian matters? This is fantastic.

If you heard a loud squee somewhere, that was I.

OMG, my two favourite characters talking and being all subtle and subtexty and all political. Reminds me that I haven't played XII in months now but this is amazing. I liked how you wrote Vayne being all polite and sweet but again and again you remind us that he's still dangerous and I love his interaction with Penelo, you still maintained her character perfectly. I loved how even when Vayne offered, Penelo has enough integrity to tell him no in a diplomatic way.

I wonder how the game's going to go now with this story, now that Penelo has learned about the Solidors and even Cid a little. Thank you for this!

This chapter is epic, The feelings, descriptions and dialogs are perfect. You made love more all the characters. And the lunch made me hungry (:D). But Penelos is right about Vayne, yet her decision is very difficult. Thank you for this chapter. Ill look forward the next one.

omg this MEETTING, this has so much feelings in it, and i love how involve penelo is not in everything! and arghhhh i LOVE YOUR WRITING, THIS STORY! THIS EVERYTHING! I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER, I HOPE SHE SAYS YES, BECAUSE THIS. THIS CAN LEAD TO A HAPPY ENDING I BELIEVE AND

MY FAVE THOUGH IS CID, BECAUSE, REASONS. YOU MAKE HIM TO WELL AND ARGGHG

feels.

Poor Penelo! I kindof feel bad for Vayne too though... Larsa needs to get there soon! .

I love you and I love this fanfic. Never stop or I shall surely perish in the depth of my mourning for this perfection.

This story has been wonderful and well-written so far, and I think that you give Vayne a lot of depth that he was lacking in the game. There was always implied depth, and the shadow of depth, but the game unfortunately never delved too deeply in his character.

The different layers of Vayne are great. Hes my favorite character now, and the last line of Cid is very funny. Thank you for this chapter.

I can't give this story enough praise. Your writing is outstanding and the level of depth you give the characters is what the game itself is missing. I love how you portray Vayne and delve into his mind and emotions. So much more to the man than simply his reputation! The friendship between him and Cid is equal parts deep and hilarious! I ol'd when Penelo fainted and Cid was being completely unhelpful. I always look forward to updates. Can't wait for the next one. Hopefully Vayne finds Larsa before he has a coronary. :)

Wow. Your writing is always incredible. I never imagined anyone could make Vayne so enjoyable a character that I just clamor to see more of each time. Wonderful stuff!

I think this line also makes for a great summary of this chapter and the one before it:
"Royal insurrections. Gangs of rogue shipwrights. Enigmatic, fainting women. It's like I never left home."

So good! You have such wonderfully complex characters. Great work! Can't wait to read more.

Wow, I'm in love with this fic! Your portrayal of Vayne, Cid, and Larsa fits so seamlessly with the game. Haha, it's totally my headcanon now. I really like how Vayne and Cid are able to have philosophic moments without turning the chapters into excessive navel-gazing sessions. Your writing is really good and quite vivid. Suffice it to say I'm hooked!

Sorry, I wish I had something more substantial to say, but this is still a great read.