First of all, it's nice to see some new Psi Factor fanfiction in here. I was glad to discover that I wasn't the only one writing them in the last 5 years.

I like the way you build tention and the fact that your story isn't kitschy, but one note has to be made. You really need to proof read your stories by a beta reader who will fix the grammatical mistakes. Your writing in English is very good, but it could be improved.

Aside from that, great story, great idea. Please keep writing PF fan fics.