loved it!

I remember starting to read this fic when you first began publishing it... and then had to stop when I hit the last update. Then my life got busy and fan fics stopped being my life, but I still got the e-mails when someone would publish a new story or chapter, including the rewrites and updates on this one. When you had finished it, I had picked it up again where I had left off, but was so utterly lost. So I favorited the whole thing, meaning to go back and re-read it.

Never did. Until the other day when I was going through my favorites and realized that I had left Tai and Cale hanging in a limbo in my head. And I'm so glad that I went back and started it over. Such a fantastic story and so wonderfully written. Great job.

Watching this from hereon. :) I think I can save my spazzing for another time. Brilliantly written, I do hope you continue this.

Oh, you can't end it like that, that's just evil!

That can't be the ending! I really really really really hope you write more. I'm so caught up in this story. You have this amazing way of writing what your characters are feeling and what's going on to them. You make up these characters who become real people. Continue this story! If you don't finish it for your fans sake, finish it for Cale and Tai. Great story.

This story has been sitting in my favorites for quite some time now. I just haven't had the time to really sit down and read it. I was going through my favorites and found it again, and decided to give it a try (while at work mind you haha). I have gotten through nine chapters and can't stop. This story is wonderful. You give so much emotion to your characters and describe them so well, I can see them in my mind. It's an amazing story. I don't know if you finished it, or are in the process of finishing it, because I haven't finished reading it yet, and I thought I should drop at least a review now and then soon after, instead of one at the end, just in case you haven't finished. I can tell not only by your Author Notes, but by your writing, you put a lot of effort into this story, and I'm glad you wrote it. It's amazing so far, and I can't wait to read more, which is what I'll be doing once I send this. Be proud of it.

You definitely need to keep working on this, I'm missing the updates. Brilliant fanfic, don't stop!

Then what happens?

Wow tigrin this is great stuff. I got so into it I was sad it was over after chapter 12. Keep up the good work. Gotta see if there's anything else here you wrote.
Rainy

Funny... I've know about your fanfic all this time, Tigrin, been a Titan AE fan, and never read this... what a fool I've been! lol... it's really, really good.. it'a obvious alot of passion has been going into writing this- keep it up! it's wonderful.

The imagery in the first few paragraphs and slipped into places here and there through this chapter, is downright stunning. I like the way you combine the imagery with the emotions; you let Cale's disillusion, Tai's despair and the mingled malice/hope/intent of the other characters manifest themselves in the surroundings. There's a term for it - how the environment reflects the feelings of the characters: pathetic fallacy.

I notice that the Tai/Taylor struggle still persists; I wonder if it was your intention when you insert both names to mirror Tai's confusion, and this unmesurable sense of loss. There's enough grievance that flows through the characters, which makes me wish for some justice that will be the amending force in your story. I'm still slightly unclear on the concept of visions: so far all I can conceive is that the "visions" that you give to Cale are a consequence, sort of a repurcussion that also torments Tai in memories. You mention Earth very fleetingly in the story at certain places, so that's where I got the idea from.

You're defintely rewriting my ideas of Cale that I've always had since I watched Titan A.E. And you're not wrong about that too: failure is a plague and recollections cause despair, and all I can do sometimes is just remember and get more and more choked, smothered in the moodiness of a ghostly feeling in spite of myself.

Just... be careful, k? It's almost as if the story possesses you. I know it's the only way... that in expressing yourself through a character, through the story, there's some remorse. It's sometimes rather parasitic; even in the deepest depths of despair, try to tranlate it into the mood, surroundings, settings, instead of the character too much. It'll makes things seem less painful. Trust me on that.

Beautiful chapter, as I've said before. You do such a wonderful job of putting emotion into every chapter of this work, and it really shows. The imagery is fantastic as well, with the weather discriptions being my favorite.

I know this one's become really personal to you, and it shows, in that it's developing like a dream, and it's a really good read.

Keep it up!

DON'T LEAVE US HANGING!Please!Please! Finish it !

This just keeps getting better and better! As usual,you defined your character's personalities nicely. Thanks for a worthwhile read,Tigrin. _

-Akita

There's a marked shift in the language you use; in the earlier chapters, the descriptions stood out pretty vividly, but in this one I couldn't help noticing more two-ended dialogue (especially the emphasis on Cale's conversation with the man in charge of the farm). The dark humour is not hard to spot. And I noticed you repeat certain words to get your point through, like 'vapid' and 'blood', while using the theme of Tai's not needing pity to undermine everything that Tai feels. It's quite impressive, and it's quite a well-written for the emotions you are trying to underline.

But I think the story's progressing a little too fast in some places. Like Cale talking with Tek; there seems to be something missing from those ten or so short paragraphs that makes that portion slightly forced.

About the story's becoming so intertwined with how you feel. I have felt that too sometimes, but I think we are really helpless in these circumstances. Of course, this way the feelings, the dark shades of your mind which you convey, become more real and powerful. Yet, like you said about your Treasure Planet fic, sometimes the strain of being led in two ways can be worse than despair. In some ways, it has become a sort of refuge, and hopefully, it will be enough to shelter all that you go through.

Apart from stressing the irony at the owner of the farm's treatment of Tai, Dover and Cody, is there any other significance in the Ephesians verse you added? And are you also being deliberate when you switch back and forth between the names Tai and Taylor?