|Reviews for DREAM|
| Kirei Ryuusei 4/10/12 . chapter 12
It's good to see you updated. Um...well I don't have much to say other than great writing. I'm not big on duels but I'm pretty sure everything is in order.
Glad that you're outta your blues.
| Lightning Hebi 4/9/12 . chapter 2
Yeah, early on when I wrote this I had major problems working out the formatting. I was too used to writing essays, where paragraphs and word count are more important than story-writing where making it not strain people's eyes and making it flow is more important.
If you keep reading on, you'll notice a change after a while where I sort it out a bit so that it's not too chunky. Glad you like it though! To be honest I've always felt like I haven't been telling this story very well, and because it's been nearly 2 years since I finished that first chapter, I might go back and rewrite it. But that's for a later date.
| yugisun 4/8/12 . chapter 2
I have a feeling this is a really good story, and I like the idea. However, the way you've formatted it is making it hard to follow. I feel that speech should be on separate lines to description and other speech and some of the paragraphs are quite big.
Each paragraph in a story is supposed to reprisent one idea and multiple paragraphs break several ideas. I would say a few closely linked sentences would make a paragraph such as you would have one paragraph decribing a room.
Or maybe I'm just being an idiot? I don't want to sound too harsh though. I've been wanting to write something similar actually but it might end up being a rewrite of an existing Yu-Gi-Oh story I have.
| Kirei Ryuusei 4/20/11 . chapter 11
Oh my god why? Why is it all my favorite characters die? *tears then wipes them away* Now I have to wonder if Myst and Blaze will make it through! I don't see any way this duel could get cancelled so they might have to duke it out til the end...Man, I can't wait to see what happens...
| Shadow Drone King 3/12/11 . chapter 1
Chapter was a little short.
| Kirei Ryuusei 3/12/11 . chapter 10
Well it wasn't a win, but it still was a cancellation. I suppose Lightning is just plain lucky. But wow now I'm just intrigued by who wants Lightning dead and who had 'erased' the scene.
| Kirei Ryuusei 12/2/10 . chapter 9
OH man! I can't believe it! Lightning might lose? Gah, I hope not! Pull off a miracle please!
| Kirei Ryuusei 11/30/10 . chapter 8
Whoa...that was a cool chapter. Though I also feel very sad for the humans apparently used in human experimentation. Also, I'm very curious about what happens next because of the ending of the chapter.
| Kirei Ryuusei 9/17/10 . chapter 7
Whoa, so didn't see the five chapter update but I'm grateful for them. Your story is so intriguing with it's unique theme. I like it. A lot.
Oh, and did Lightning just kill off one of the children under his charge?
| Kirei Ryuusei 9/16/10 . chapter 2
I really like how you describe everything. It's...unique and I'm still trying to piece the story together but I'm really interested so far.
| Kirei Ryuusei 9/15/10 . chapter 1
Hm, death in the first chapter? Already something, I'd like to see more of.