It's good to see you updated. Um...well I don't have much to say other than great writing. I'm not big on duels but I'm pretty sure everything is in order.

Glad that you're outta your blues.

Yeah, early on when I wrote this I had major problems working out the formatting. I was too used to writing essays, where paragraphs and word count are more important than story-writing where making it not strain people's eyes and making it flow is more important.

If you keep reading on, you'll notice a change after a while where I sort it out a bit so that it's not too chunky. Glad you like it though! To be honest I've always felt like I haven't been telling this story very well, and because it's been nearly 2 years since I finished that first chapter, I might go back and rewrite it. But that's for a later date.

I have a feeling this is a really good story, and I like the idea. However, the way you've formatted it is making it hard to follow. I feel that speech should be on separate lines to description and other speech and some of the paragraphs are quite big.

Each paragraph in a story is supposed to reprisent one idea and multiple paragraphs break several ideas. I would say a few closely linked sentences would make a paragraph such as you would have one paragraph decribing a room.

Or maybe I'm just being an idiot? I don't want to sound too harsh though. I've been wanting to write something similar actually but it might end up being a rewrite of an existing Yu-Gi-Oh story I have.

Oh my god why? Why is it all my favorite characters die? *tears then wipes them away* Now I have to wonder if Myst and Blaze will make it through! I don't see any way this duel could get cancelled so they might have to duke it out til the end...Man, I can't wait to see what happens...

Chapter was a little short.

Well it wasn't a win, but it still was a cancellation. I suppose Lightning is just plain lucky. But wow now I'm just intrigued by who wants Lightning dead and who had 'erased' the scene.

OH man! I can't believe it! Lightning might lose? Gah, I hope not! Pull off a miracle please!

Whoa...that was a cool chapter. Though I also feel very sad for the humans apparently used in human experimentation. Also, I'm very curious about what happens next because of the ending of the chapter.

Whoa, so didn't see the five chapter update but I'm grateful for them. Your story is so intriguing with it's unique theme. I like it. A lot.

Oh, and did Lightning just kill off one of the children under his charge?

I really like how you describe everything. It's...unique and I'm still trying to piece the story together but I'm really interested so far.

Hm, death in the first chapter? Already something, I'd like to see more of.