IN THE NAME OF RORY! But seriously, that aside I felt this scene was well written. It was simple and expressed the emotion of both characters without getting too sappy. And as far as them never saying the word "sex"...I feel that was realistic for these characters in the story you're portraying. A lot can be said without saying things and I believe that's what you've shown here.

I'm still totally confused by where this story is going, but I am open to many ships and look forward to future chapters.

We don't need another filler, I promise we don't... :P I still resent you for hurting my Rory :[ But I look forward to the next chapter, I think. :P

IIIIIIN THE NAAAAAAAAAAAAAME OF you horrible woman.

:P

Plot-wise, I am intrigued, and you must update FORTHWITH! Not even sure what that means, but do it.

Constructive-criticism-wise, I really liked the last two sections, but I think the decision and kiss section could have been a bit more descriptive? Maybe a bit more focus on the kiss? I understand you don't really write romance, as you say, so of course it's not going to be perfect first time :P

But it seemed a little short; for example, the "Then the Doctor kissed Amy, and Amy kissed the Doctor" part did TELL me they kissed, but it didn't really SHOW me. Get what I mean?

Anyway, as you say, you're not experienced in writing romance, so I'm not exactly expecting some epic scene from a classic romance, but yeah, those are my pointers :P Hope this doesn't sound harsh " You just need plenty of practise ;D ;D ;D

what.

No time to review, gotta read on. :3

Aww, poor Rory :( I hope you make him happy again before something inevitably shitty happens to him in series 6 :P

Nice chapter and yay for updates! :D

AH LOVED IT :D Its awesome, y'know :D The last scene was extremely tasteful and it was very well written - you've got that gift of something writing abstact things that I can't quite perfect, dammit. Ah well. It was awesome :D

for a first go at a romantic scene, it was absolutely fine. don't worry about it.

fantastic story. please update soon.

THE FEZZ COMMANDS YOU!

i really love this story! i am guessing that river thinks rory is the doctor? anyways can't wait for more.

i liked the thing with jane austen.

OOOH, nice ending. Can't say I expected it, Amy never struck me as the motherly sort, even when she was pregnant :P

As soon as I saw "President Snow", I thought OMG IF THAT'S A HUNGER GAMES REFERENCE I'LL LOVE YOU FOREVER.

YESSSS.

Anyway, great chapter! Very tense and mysterious, I liked it :D And I guess a hint at River's age would be helpful, but hey, it keeps us guessing! :P

wait, not jack...rory? hang on seriously she knows rory!

river likes jaaack i think, this could get interesting but how can she not know the doctor? hmmmmmm

UPDATE!

mnm x

Hmm! Intrigueing!