Ah such genius, genius writing. And it's obvious you do your research well. I hope to see more chappies! I haven't read a fic so well-balanced in romance and adventure! It's so perfect!

Woo some lip-locking and almost sex! Lol I didn't think about an enemy ambushing them when having sex to be the reason for them to not have sex. I was thinking more of Yugi not being able to walk the following day XD.

Goodness I don't know HOW you managed to input such as smexy puzzleshipping interaction in such a DIRE situation. Ah with all the Atem smexyness and that horseback riding thing... *blush* wow that was hot.

They are so CUTE XD And I really enjoy your writings style, I love how you've incorporated the modern-day characters (or their ancestors, any way XD) into the past. All in all it's been a great read thus far, I happily await your next update :D

Update! *glomps*

How come Netjer is capitalized? I don't know much about Egyptian, but is this instance following one of the same rules that German follows?

I wonder how Yugi's going to feel about teaching Atem poker... XD

brittney

I really liked this fic. The idea of Yuugi traveling back to in time and meeting Atem has always fascinated me, but I haven't really been able to find any good fics about that before. This one seems to fit the bill, though (even if your references to cacti in Africa bother me a little).

I really like Yuugi's issues with being attracted to Atem but being afraid that if he acts on it it'll put them in danger. Hopefully now that there somewhere they aren't likely to be attacked any second he'll be able to relax a little bit.

Great! I wonder who will win? Update soon please.

enjoying this story a lot, you are a great writer, please don't stop! :)

i love this story. you wrote it very detailed and beautifully. it is one of the best time travel fics i have read and only few of them are glad you decided to continue this fic. Actually i have skipped it the first time i see it on the main page because the prologue is kind of confusing(due to the huge size of the ygo archive, as a tipycal reader, i find story to read by sum, length and first chapter. i still want to beat myself for almost missed such a cool story).i only found it again after reading SLIBSSLIBD and look for your stuff and got hooked.i love how you wrote the charaters act,they are very realilism and suitable for their roles, sometime not very in character compare to the real show but i like them that way since that is more interesting in the situation . i would love to follow this fic till the end, please update soon.

*grins* Well! Ain't THAT cute? xD UPDATE!

Nonnie: Ohhh! Atem is making a move on Yugi! Go get him tiger!

Seli: Damn Yugi's self righteousness he was so having a good laid with a sex-god and here he denies his desires! Tisk shame on him, it is like a once in your life time opportunity-literally in this story line!

E.U.M: calm down my children our dear Authoress will so have a good smex in this story just be patient. See there (points at the rate) its M so it is going to be good... (slyly smirks) But at least Atem got rejected for the first time since he is Pharaoh and all he is suppose to have everything and not denying to have it, so this is a big shock for him.

Nonnicel: Yaaayyyy! You updated! Yugi has some serious issues with his attraction towards his other-self-er great-great somthing-grandfather? Ehehehe... there are possibilities XD

Selinnone: Atem is such a manwhore-eh at times when he is having his harem room full of big boobies. Does that make Atem bi-curious XP

E.U.M: awaiting for the next upate!

I have to say this is the only 'Yuugi-visits-Ancient-Egypt' fic I've read that I've actually felt was a good representation of the YGO series characters, and of Ancient Egypt. Time travel is weird, and since we're talking fic I don't expect writers to be experts of Egyptology... but perhaps that is why it's so exciting when a fic writer HAS done research and does know a bit about ancient Egypt.

I like your characterization of Atem most. He feels completely different, but at the same time it's easy to see him as the spirit of the puzzle. Yuugi is also characterized well. I also like that you take nothing for granted- ie you do into the reality that Atem would of course want the nature of a band-aid explained to him, etc. I think these cultural differences could just as easily be boring as heck in a story (perhaps why the YGO series fines it's ways to glaze over them) but for the most part I think you handled them nicely.

I hope you update again! It feels to early to see where this story is really going so I'd be eager to read more, haha.

I have fallen in love with this story. X3 So well written and detailed! :D

"Too terrified to move, he peered up at the intruder, his dark red eyes wide with fear. [...] The pharaoh bowed his head, biting his lips together, before lifting his gaze to meet those of his enemy's. They were defiant now, hard, narrow, and as cutting as two broken shards of glass. A child of Re should never show fear. Though you feel it in the very blood of your body, in every corner of your soul! Never let your enemy have it!"

That was probably the best description of Atem's eyes and the feelings set behind them that I have ever read. I love how brilliantly it illustrates the philosophies he's been raised with and what kind of a person he is. Just beautiful.

Even though I'm reviewing 'chapter 1', I've actually finished the third chapter. And I have to say, the quality of your writing only gets better and better with each one. I love the growing sexual tension between Atem and Yuugi. And I love the fact that you gave Yuugi a backbone and some credit for having a good head on his shoulders, despite his chronic shyness. (Which was adorable in the way you wrote it, btw. I very much enjoyed the mix of brilliant, determined young man and... "oh dear lord he's looking at me funny what do I do now?") It felt very in character for post-series Yuugi.

The tone, setting, and pacing were all very well handled. And, my inner fangirl has to admit that you paint a very attractive image of Atem... even when he's concussed and half-dead riding a horse. That little moment where he's dead tired and almost unconscious, and he jerks himself back to attention so he can guide their horse to the temple... ho boy. Well done.

I'm looking forward to reading more of this story as it comes out! You've done wonderful work on it so far!