0.o wow what a way to begin. I had problems getting into it... but once I figured out what was going on... 0.o wow.

Excellent chapter my good friend

Before I get started, here's an example of a review:

"Your story sucks balls. Take this down from FF dot net and go back to kindergarten and learn to read before you clog up this website with worthless trash."

That above review (plus some additional swear words) is what we call a flame. I've looked through your reviews some and I don't believe I saw an actual flame. What I saw, however, is called constructive criticism - readers pointing out the flaws in your story so you can fix them. So you can make your story better.

No story is perfect. You can't expect everyone to love your story. There are some who dislike it because they are jealous and some because your story has a reason to be disliked. Could be bad grammar, spelling, boring plots, boring characters, etcetera.

Please do not pull off the classic "If you don't like it, don't read it and GTFO" excuse. If all your reviews are about how much your readers love your story, you're not going to improve. Your writing level is going to stay the same.

Every writer receives constructive criticism. A good writer knows that it is for their own good and uses it to write a better story, to improve.

That said, I'm going to tell you that you need to fix your grammar and spelling for a better reading experience. Junon, not Junion, and Lucrecia, not Lucreica, to name just a few. You lack punctuation. Punctuation is always needed at the end of dialogue. You either choose a period, comma, question mark, or exclamation mark. Start a new paragraph when a new person is talking.

Your characters are Mary-Sues. Perfect, powerful, and many people are in love with them to the point of fighting over them.

I'll confess part of the reason I wrote this review is because I didn't like your attitude. I didn't like how you wrote off the reviewers who didn't like your story as "haters" and ignored advice. I know it's too late for you to make major changes to your story because it has about a hundred and forty chapters, but you won't get far with this kind of attitude.

Once again, this is not a flame. This is not hating. This is constructive criticism.

Hey, I just found this story a week ago, and I've been reading as much as I can. I'm on Part 4 Advent children. I love the story. I'm always wondering how things would have been different if Genesis hadn't deserted and Sephiroth hadn't gone insane. I love the story so far and I'll catch up as soon as I can.

Yo yo good chappy!

Hey hey yo yo! Good chapter

Dame shit just got real. It time like this when I wish I had a city size transformer laying around here some where.

Yay finally updated :)! hehe i had to go back and reread ch. 15 cause i forgot what was going lol. Ooooh Vincent final shows chaos. cant believe malaika forgot to update while you were in japan omg how was japan? Gina said it was effing amazing anyway keep the updates coming talk to you soon...?

See this why I always say to keep a city size transformer on hand like metroplex of trypticon. You never know when your base will be attacked. Any who nice chapter can't wait for the next.

This story is AWESOME, I love reading long stories and your OCs are great. Can't wait for the next chapter!

I have been a long time reader of this story since around chapter 20 or so. I love this story i think what you do with the characters is fantastic. I hope all is well and that you update soon. Other than that take your time with it.

I have been a long time reader of this story since around chapter 20 or so. I love this story i think what you do with the characters is fantastic. I hope all is well and that you update soon. Other than that take your time with it.

what if i dont wanna

lolz

keep it up

TOW

When I started to read thi story I was looking forward to something special. But sadly it confirmed again that OC/canon stories aren't the luckiest choice. The author has to be very skilled to masterfuly integrate original characters into canon universe, to make their stories sound natural, to give readers a time to get used to new characters. It's not only about good grammar or nice writting style, but mainly about being a good psychologist, to understand canon characters and world.

In this case I just see another attempt of self-insertion. The plot is stereotypical, OCs unoriginal. And them being in love and pregnant, really? Such a cliche.

I guess it's quite late to give a CC (even if it usually sounds more like forcing personal visions on other). But for all reviewers who criticize or praise the story, you didn't help author much to improve.

I wish you more luck with your future writting.

Me Grimlock say that sequel title be with all my heart. Also me Grimlock say that baby he a boy cause me Grimlock make him new member of Dinobots.