|Reviews for Wait A Minute! I Was Cloned?|
| shadow6116 11/21/10 . chapter 19
| Wildcat 10/19/10 . chapter 19
Beautiful ending! I loved the story, it was kind of bittersweet, promising things would get better but at the same time, grief pervades your writing.
Alright, now for the rating.
Liked it alot, thanks for writing!
| Luna Maximoff 10/16/10 . chapter 19
This was a really good story. You're an awesome writer.
| Wildcat 10/16/10 . chapter 18
*starts crying* Awww, poor 'Magda' and Magsy.
Well, is this the end for this story? I think a slight epilogue is needed for the case to truly be closed.
Please update this and Touch Time!
| Silver 10/16/10 . chapter 17
Awesome story! Can't wait for more chapters!
| X-24 10/16/10 . chapter 16
DAMN SINISTER! HOW DARE HE INSULT PIETRO AND RUIN HIS LIFE! Please update ASAP!
| Wildcat 10/15/10 . chapter 15
'His eyes were glittering rubies, with evil shining from their depths.'
...That looks familiar.
Anyway, detail is DEFINITELY better in this chapter, though I noticed that you never really give the reader a peek into what the characters are thinking. Hmmm, thoughts of a character tend to help a reader understand what's going on and get more involved in the story.
Here, I'll give you an example. (It's not specific to any story)
Instead of 'he punched him, making him fall onto the ground' you can use this.
'He had to make it. He just had to. He couldn't let Wanda down Not while she was in the hands of that madman.
He skidded to a stop in front of the crowd of henchmen, letting a smirk play on his face, hiding his uncertianity.
"Too easy!" He chuckled, jumping and battering a henchman to the ground with his fists.
"Well, let's see how much beauty sleep these guys are gonna get..." he muttered, as Magneto's goons advanced upon him.'
See how much detail you can put into one little scene? I know you can do it! Please update this and Touch Time soon!
| Wildcat 10/15/10 . chapter 14
*twitches* *groans* SO MAAANNNYYY CLOOONNNESS!
Anyway, great story so far! Yippee, IT'S THE WEEKEND! (:
Do you have a ps3? Just wondering, ok?
| X-Boy 10/15/10 . chapter 13
Great story. Update soon.
| X7 10/15/10 . chapter 12
Great chapter. You're an awesome writer.
| Q2 Q3 10/14/10 . chapter 11
Q2: Great job!
Q3: Yeah! Love this story!
Q2 & Q3: Update soon!
| Wildcat 10/13/10 . chapter 10
Pretty good so far, but you may want to change a few phrases you use, stuff like 'He punched Ben in the back and knocked him down hard.' You could have said something like 'He crashed his fist in between Ben's shoulderblades, abruptly knocking him down.' Don't be afraid to add detail of WHERE people are hit (unless it's inappropiate and you don't want to)
Other than that, pretty good!
Please update! I've been waiting... and waiting... I've actually checked this and 'Touch Time' every hour or so. Has the deadly writer's block taken you in its clutches again?
Thanks! (good job!)
| Wildcat 10/11/10 . chapter 9
That's a good chapter!
Hmmm, how many more clones shall they meet? Wietro was cute, like the name!Please update this and Touch Time! (PLLLEEEAASSEE update Touch Time! I'm dyin' to know what happens next!)Oh, and if the reviews I sent in that story contradict, look at the one I sent later, k?(Forget about everybody doing the same exact plot...) Sorry if I confused ya. (:
| Wildcat 10/11/10 . chapter 8
Ooh... Interesting turn of developments...
Alright, 'insert some helpful comment about writing here.'
(I'm too brain-dead to think right now.) :P
Great job! Update soon, (and the other one, 'Touch Time') (:
| Poseidon Wolf 10/10/10 . chapter 7
Oooh action, suspence, where will it end.