Awesome chapter. I liked the ending "so the danger was over after all." If you do a sequel. An idea is to go back to that sentence. And have something happen. It doesn't have to right after that sentence. It could be a flashback or something. But thats an idea. If you do a sequel can't wait to read it. An alternative ending? Hmm. I think half of the story was the fact that the boys were there. Besides, the girls got kidnapped because of grudges. Maria and all the other kidnappers needed the boys there.

I like how you left it open so that maybe Casimir didn't die after all. Thanks for a really fun story!

awesome! i would love to see the alternative ending, maybe you could also do a one-shot about ho Casimir came to light with Maria if you wanted to. :)

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i love this story and i think a sequel would be awesome but its ur choice

I think you should do one more chapter. It doesn't seem like it should go to the epilogue next. You should do a nessie pov. About Casimer. Can't wait till epilogue

Poor Casimir. Is he really dead? Or did he do something to Jane? I know we're not supposed to like immortal children, but I think it would be hard to kill them.

you should write a sequel

The last few chapters did seem to be rushed. Maybe you should do a plan or something. I know that plans are annoying and all that. But how about you do a must include list. And stick to it. Just an idea. I'm interested in Casimir, he sounds like he'll be a sweet character!

I am still LOVING this story. I think you have an incredible imagination, and a real talent for telling a good story. Re-writing and tightening your previous chapters can't hurt, and can only help you grow as a writer. I don't think any of your work is rubbish, and you should stop putting yourself down. I wish I had your gift!

i think you should update your chapters more often.

and you know you cant just stop you've got readers to your book you have RESPONSABILITY now.

please update further

i love this story its amazing update soon please :D

AHHH CONTINUE PLEASE! I'M BEGGING ON MY KNEES!

i liked it keep on going

Didn't think I'd ever say this, but I'm so bored! UPDATE!

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