Very interesting! Thankyou

That was awesome and I loved it but really I doubt Sasuke would propose like that. Hes more likely to say, "You know I need to still revive my clan, care to help me with that?

You got to make a sequel, you can't just leave us hanging here. That would be mean... and i liked this story and i want to know what happens.

Sasuke better not die.

OMGNess! I DON"T WANT SASUKE TO DIE!

Wow, This is short but surprising. Kiyoto knows how she feels about Sasuke and even after what Sasuke did to her, She can still be forgiving and still love him, and can't stand loving her. Great Chapter, and now I am wondering who is at the door of her house, usually it might be Sasuke, and other times its another character that no one expects.

I'm sorry to say this, but your character is a mary sue. A mary sue is a perfect person with nothing wrong with them whatersoever and is very unique and plays a huge part in the story. Now, I've only read the first chapter but her description is sue filled. Now, first I want to say I saw no flaws in the description. She is strong, thin, but has curves in the right places, and the always popular emo! You also tend to the words 'beautiful' a bit much, and again, no flaws in her appearance. Next, I have a problem with her hair, since 'beautiful' blue and purple mixtures in her head. This doesn't happen irl, even if the mom/dad dies her hair, with Sakura being an exception but the rest have normal hair colors.

Next is her history with Sasuke. Now, I've only read the first chapter but I assume that she will be with Sasuke through his time of need, but don't flame if I'm wrong. If she's through Sasuke while he's in emotional pain the entire time, then why would he be lonely, why would he be emo? And even if she isn't with him he knows that she's still alive, and will most likely either reject her or cling on to her, again not making him lonely and messing up the storyline. When you write fanfictions you have to make sure that the canon plot is A-OK and that you have all the characters involved, not just Sasuke.

Now, I know this review is going to be flamed, but this is for your own good, and if you're still calm and not in a rampage there's still hope for you ( Mary Sue writers often use self insert and feel like I'm insulting you when I insult your character ) I suggest that you go on youtube and look up 'MelinaPendulum' she's has a fantastic writing section called 'Melina on writing' ,or MOW, that help writers out with Mary Sues, Vampires, Sex, all that good stuff. I'm sorry to inform you that she's a mary sue, but hey, someones got to do it. :)

-Tippy

Great Chapter, i Wonder what happens next ... this is getting interesting.

Yeah this chapter is short, oh well it was still good :D

Yesh! We get to see the fight, I wonder what happens next :D

She finally meets Sasuke after a long time! I have a feeling Sasuke is going to say rude stuff to Kiyoto-chan

i like that song, and great chapter. Sasuke can be sooo rude sometimes

This was actually sad, i had tears forming but that means that it is a good story casue i'm showing feeling.

Man, this is a shocker, not really. Anyways good chapter i liked how you planned it out. I can't believe she almost died.

I wonder what happened this is getting exciting and i'm glad that Kiyoto is making friends again and enjoying her feelings once more.