The content of the story was good - but you need to work on your grammar. It's very difficult to read with so little punctuation and so many lengthy run-on sentences. Also, proper names should be capitalized.

GRAMMER!

I'm sure that this was a great story, because I loved what I could read of it, but the english was...really hard to understand. I would love to read this if you cleaned it up a bit!

Anywho, just a little constructive criticism. We all make little grammar errors here and there (we don't have editors!). I hope that you keep at it!

If you separate the dialogue and have smaller paragraphs it would be easier to read. Otherwise, I rather enjoyed it!

Good job!just saw tis amazing film on HBO!

Great writting! You might want to make the paragraphs smaller though; it was hard to read the story.

This is a really good fanfic. It just needs to be polished a little. I think all the big blocked paragraphs kind of make it look like too much, if you broke them down a little it would help a lot.

Nevertheless, this was interesting and I think you have Declen's character pegged. I hope you write more Leap Year fanfics. This is by far the most intriguing one I've read. Good job.